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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Soul (07/13/06)
I lost my soul
The day you left me
I lost my soul
The day you were set free.

I remember that fateful day
My tears ran like a waterfall
The day you were taken from me
I was shattered like a broken doll.

You were so young
When you were taken
It was such a shock
everyone wished you would awaken.

I couldn't sleep anymore
I would dream of your death
Your frozen face haunted me
With your very last breath.

I awoke with tears
My soul was ripped from me
And my heart was broken
Why did you have to be set free?

Everyday felt like the world had crashed
everyday it felt like my world was frozen
everyday, I live without you, is a day
I wish you had not been chosen.

I found my soul
The day I realized you were in heaven
I found my soul
The day you would’ve turned Seven.

I love you my dear son.
When I lost you I lost my heart.
You were and are the best thing in my life
Even though we are apart.
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Date
Sue Dent
07/20/06
Such a sweet entry! Her loss becoming her gain! Very well written!
Jan Ross
07/25/06
I can feel her pain. I can't imagine losing a small child ~ it would be one of the most difficult things to get through. Thank you for sharing! :)
Brenda Craig
07/25/06
Heart wrenching,with life coming out of death. Wonderful poem!
Debbie Sickler
07/25/06
Hehe, already gottcha on your blog for this one. :)
Shari Armstrong 
07/25/06
Heart breaking - very well done.
Jan Ackerson
07/25/06
Very tender and sweet--I'd like to see more consistency of meter, but the simplicity of the poem really shines through.
Joanne Sher 
07/25/06
I can SO feel for her - and I like the way you "sandwiched" this piece with losing and finding your soul.
Rita Garcia
07/25/06
I felt each emotion, pain, grief, angish, and healing!





Trina Courtenay
07/26/06
Very heart breaking - her lose was her gain! Awesome job.
Stephen Paynter
07/26/06
I found this very moving - I am sitting here with tears pouring down my face. You captured and communicated the pain so well. I would have liked to have been led through the healing process too. A very strong piece. I am sure you will not be in beginners for long!
Tracey Jackson
07/26/06
Very moving. It made me wonder how long this healing process took until you got to the wonderful lines of
"I found my soul
The day I realized you were in heaven
I found my soul
The day you would’ve turned Seven."
Thanks for sharing.