The Official Writing Challenge
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10/12/17
Good job in taking a physical storm and incorporating in spiritual elements. I think this piece could have been more powerful with an illustration of someone who lived out the principles you described.
10/13/17
Good illustration of tying storms with spiritual aspects of the floods we have had recently.

I may have added a family being affected from the storm.
Your thoughts in the last paragraph - the conclusion - was very good. I felt, as I was reading your article, that the body was somehow to long. Say the same thing but just shorter.

Your overall thoughts were excellent.

Keep writing.
10/15/17
Excellent thoughts on the challenge of "Storms". Hopefully those that had encountered those recent catastrophic storms will read this and be blessed by your encouraging words.

I think shorter paragraphs would have made this easier to read. Small bites are easier to swallow.

God bless and look forward to your future work.