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Topic: BUG (04/06/17)
I am not behaving like a six-year-old through tantrums because I am not getting what I want.

Oh No, I am a grown woman, desperately in need and acting as such.

I wanted it so badly. I would dream of having it, using it and being seen with it.

But it was far from my reach, I couldn’t get it by myself so I asked a Friend.

However, for days, even months I would ask Him to get it for me but he wouldn’t respond. Days passed by and I had enough of his unfaithfulness and stinginess. He could easily get a hold of it and get it to me but He wouldn’t.

What was the big deal?

I would speak angrily to Him and quit asking kindly and patiently for the stuff, while I nag Him the whole time, day and night.

I would nag Him even with my thoughts, I was furious and just couldn’t take it anymore. Why wouldn’t He just get it for me. My continuous asking wasn’t changing anything though.

All I was asking for an opportunity to walk into a snake den, a cobra to be precise, one that is big, long, dangerous and scary.

I needed it as soon as possible and fast.

His answer would have ushered me into one adventurous life and would solve a few of my problems.

Understanding why he wouldn’t do this for me just beat my mind, especially when he had gotten so many things for me already. Compared to those ones, this wasn’t much of a big deal.

I think I made him so angry with my constant request and nags or maybe he just pitied me the whole time because I was one ignorant person who had no clue what I was asking for.

What I was really asking for was an opportunity to gain admission into a particular institution just so I could be far away as possible from every restriction and have the time of my life.

But in reality, I was asking for trip down into a snake den, because this request being answered would have resulted in my life coming to a complete ruin.

It would have halted my spiritual growth through its bite into them, infesting them with its poison and send me off on a path with an unpleasant end.

So many times, I have gone asking Him for the most dangerous things in my ignorance.

Bugging Him to allow my life to go down in ruins without even knowing.

I am glad he pays no attention to some of my requests. Boy, my life would have just been wrecked by now. And to think He hated me when I didn’t get my request answered when He loved me more than I loved myself.

I am currently asking Him for one thing now

I wonder what that really is by his understanding. I would just wait for him to decide.
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Michael Dreher
04/14/17
Hello and thank you for writing.

First I just need to say that I can relate. Often, we tend to think we know better than our Heavenly Father. We ask for things that He knows we don't need, or will lead us in the wrong direction. Thank the Lord He doesn't answer every prayer the way we want Him to.

On the critical side, you have some run-on sentences. You could use some work on your sentence structure. For instance:

"I think I made him so angry with my constant request and nags or maybe he just pitied me the whole time because I was one ignorant person who had no clue what I was asking for."

And...

"What I was really asking for was an opportunity to gain admission into a particular institution just so I could be far away as possible from every restriction and have the time of my life."

Both of these are not proper sentences as written. They need to be cut down, broken up, or reworded so they don't interrupt the flow of the story.

Other than that, I appreciate your wisdom. Your last sentence says a lot.

"I would just wait for him to decide."

Waiting is so terribly hard to do.
Larry Whittington
04/17/17
You used a very strong and vivid illustration in your piece -something we all need to be reminded of.

Well done.
Phillip Cimei
04/18/17
You did a wonderful job with the topic. We really don't understand how God considers our requests. We think of it as bugging, God probably looks at it like, "Silly child, you really can't see past your nose." I enjoyed it very much. You have some technical issues. Like Michael mentioned, tighten up your sentences. Take your time and you will write some great things. I will be watching for more. God bless.