The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/06
Good job with both rhyme and rhythm. This one practically sings!

The all-capitals are very distracting; if you re-publish this, consider more conventional capitalization.

This reminded me of an old gospel hymn. Good job!
01/16/06
The third stanza seems to break the flow a bit, had to read it through a couple of times to get the rhyming pattern. Check your syllable counts to ensure the poem flows smoothly.

I agree about the caps, but overall, good job with this poem. Thanks for sharing.
01/20/06
Such brilliant thoughts woven into a poetic pattern. Some of the rythym was Excellent, and flowed nicely! And I particularly liked the message! I also believe that all Caps takes away the beauty of the poem. However, Great Job!
01/20/06
I loved this poem! You are soooo good! I don't believe though if one does not go to church they won't get into the kingdom. Worship is part of becoming more obedient as Christ followers.

Keep up the great writing, I really really loved this.



01/22/06
Really wonderfully laid out. I have to agree though about the all caps. Unneccessary as the poem stands quite nicely, with a great message of it's own without them. God bless you, littlelight