The Official Writing Challenge
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This is lovely, yet so sad. There are so many people who feel alone in this world. Thankfully, God never leaves us.
Harmful habits can almost become an idol as they can keep a person from relying on God.

This story may encourage someone to break a harmful habit.
05/09/16
Memories sneak out - and last line - I especially liked those two lines. I enjoyed this a lot.
05/10/16
This tore my heart in two...there are so many people living this kind of existence, and it breaks my heart.

The ending was very uplifting knowing she was called home, and no longer "alone."

Beautifully written, authentic tone and vision.

Hauntingly lovely!

Blessings~
05/11/16
Wonderful descriptions and character development. My favorite line was: "Sometimes memories sneak out of my eyes and roll down my cheeks." The ending summed up the story well.

I was confused by the line: While in the hospital, hoping that the emphysema had only gotten worse, though accepting the cancer ... Did she want to die?

Well done. I hope you continue writing.
05/12/16
Congratulations, Gigi, for placing 3rd place in the Beginners category.
05/15/16
Congratulations on 3rd Place!