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TITLE: Daisy's Kitchen | Previous Challenge Entry
By Jennifer Liang
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Twins Stephanie and Stacy leafed through an old photo book reminiscing their childhood. “Do you remember our times in Grandma Daisy’s kitchen?” Stephanie asked.
Stacy pointed at a picture of her younger self proudly holding up a decorated snowman cookie and laughed. “Do I ever. It seems like we were always fighting over what was for lunch or what cookies we were going to make and somehow she diffused the situation without either of us feeling left out. All I learned about unconditional love came from her example. Especially our times in her kitchen.”
Looking thoughtful Stephanie said, “Hmm, I never thought of it that way. You are totally right. Who knew that making both peanut butter and sugar cookies at the same time would have that result?”
“She obviously did. Don’t forget the macaroni and cheese versus grilled cheese sandwiches wars.”
“How could I forget? Grandma Daisy certainly ate her share of my favorite food to finish off the box,” Stephanie chuckled.
“What was her nickname for the two of us again? Oh yeah, Day and Night. I still wonder what she meant by that but I think I am beginning to understand.” Stacy stopped her perusal of the family album long enough to suggest calling Grandma Daisy.
Jumping up to find the phone Stephanie exclaimed, “That is a great idea!”
“Good morning Grandma. How are you this morning?” Stacy cheerfully asked.
“I’m doing well. Thank you for asking. How are you doing sweetie?” Daisy replied.
“We are just fine. Stephanie and I are in my apartment looking through old pictures. We wanted to call you to ask a question.”
“Go ahead. We will see if this old woman knows the answer.”
Without delay Stephanie blurted out, “What do you mean by our nicknames Day and Night?”
“Oh. That’s easy. You may look the same but your personalities couldn’t be more different.”
“Like Day and Night?” came the question from Stacy.
“Exactly. Like Day and Night. Both of those serve a different purpose and have equal value in my eyes and the eyes of the good Lord who created them. The same goes for my beautiful granddaughters.”
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Good job!
For red ink, I had to read it several times to see anything to suggest. The sentence that starts 'Without delay Stephanie blurted out,' might not have needed the first two words since blurting usually isn't with delay.
Some others suggested a longer story and it could be, maybe the twins talking about Grandma again but I liked it as it is too. It flowed well.
I just felt the beginning would have jumped out of the box a little quicker if it started like this
“Do you remember our times in Grandma Daisy’s kitchen?” Stephanie asked her twin sister.
Tighter writing makes for more reader involvement because it moves along quicker.
I loved Grandma's wisdom at the end.
Blessings.
Nicely written entry for this weeks topic.