The Official Writing Challenge
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What a cute story. It's funny how such close people can be entirely different and be best of friends. I thought though this story could have been a little longer. Thanks for the share.
07/17/14
What a fun story...good story-telling. Great use of this week's topic.
07/17/14
Very sweet with a wonderful takeaway at the end. Nice job:)
Well written, likable could be story (listed as fiction).

Each is fearfully and wonderfully made.

Just as in Christ we are set in a fellowship of believers with different gifts for different purposes for the good of those around us.

Continue your calling for God's purpose in your life.
07/21/14
I loved it...Well done! Cute, amusing and entertaining.

God bless~
07/21/14
This was a fun, well-written story that had authentic dialogue and a great point for the ending. I too felt it needs more length, just so the ending doesn't feel so abrupt.

Good job!
Great writing and a fun story.
For red ink, I had to read it several times to see anything to suggest. The sentence that starts 'Without delay Stephanie blurted out,' might not have needed the first two words since blurting usually isn't with delay.

Some others suggested a longer story and it could be, maybe the twins talking about Grandma again but I liked it as it is too. It flowed well.
A sweet ride on a delightful read!
07/22/14
This is indeed a fun story which explores family relationships. It shows a creative use of the topic given.
07/22/14
A really enjoyable read and a cute (as in lovely) story.

I just felt the beginning would have jumped out of the box a little quicker if it started like this

“Do you remember our times in Grandma Daisy’s kitchen?” Stephanie asked her twin sister.

Tighter writing makes for more reader involvement because it moves along quicker.

I loved Grandma's wisdom at the end.

Blessings.
07/23/14
Enjoyable and delightful tale of twins.

Nicely written entry for this weeks topic.