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07/24/10
It reads like a scene from a black and white movie, transporting me to the side of your MC.Great job of revealing the spiritual truth hidden below the surface!
Wow this is a very powerful piece. You did a great job with making me feel the fear. The Bible verse was perfect. If this is based on a true story, it could be the start of an outstanding devotion. If it's fiction, I could see it as an article in a Christian Magazine. It would need a little help with editing, but it is a powerful message. You did a great job of finding a Bible verse to go with the story and topic.