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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)
They couldn’t have chosen a better time to call her for the interview. After three years of being out of work Janet could have taken anything offered to her in form of employment. So desperate was she that she couldn’t sleep all night before the day of the interview.

It had seemed unreal when the company she had been working for had announced a reduction of its staff. This, they had said was as a result of a fall in their sales. She had not grasped the full impact that would have on her and her four children who she was bringing up single-handedly after their father died in a road accident.

She had not even had time to recover from that blow and then the news of loosing her job had come calling. That was the day she knew that for sure misfortunes never do come single handed.

So for the next three years she had struggled, as she could, to put even one meal on the table. It was hard especially because she had lost most of her friends as soon as they knew her fate. She had struggled on, encouraged by her faith in the Lord and her knowledge that one day it would be all better.

On the day of the interview, she got up early and donned her favorite suit. It was one she had bought a long while ago. Even with all the sprucing up she had given it, it still looked out of fashion. But it would just have to do for that day.

As she walked to the bus stop to catch an early morning bus into town after a tearful goodbye from the children, Janet only hoped that this time around, just if she got the job, she could manage to set up a secure future for the kids and that the suffering they had all gone through would remind them to save up for a rainy day.
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Patrick Whalen
03/13/08
I'm not quite sure this is spot-on with the topic but it has a good premise. Use the word count to expand upon the main character. The repetetive use of "had" and "she" stops the flow of the story, for me anyway. Keep it up!
Yvonne Blake 
03/15/08
What a good mother!
I'd like a few more descriptions of the mother, her children or even the thought of the new job.
It's "losing" instead of "loosing".
Wonderful message.
Thank you for writing this.
Shayne Catoe
03/16/08
I see where you are going with the topic. "Come Rain...Come Shine." I like this. I think to explore and develop the "shine" more, will give a better rounded out story. You get the feelings of the mother across so well.
Joshua Janoski
03/16/08
I liked the mother's determination to provide for her family.

There were some punctuation problems that made the story a little bit difficult for me to read, but those can be easily fixed.

I would have liked to have seen the outcome of her interview. I sure hope she got the job. Don't be afraid to use your full word count to tell your story. :)

Thank you for sharing.
Mandy White
03/17/08
I like the 5th paragaph where she tried to spruce up her suit to no avail. It showed a new spark in her attitude. I'm not sure I see the topic illustrated clearly here. You may want someone to read over your work to check for mistakes that are easily overlooked. Keep writing!