The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/08
Oh, what great writing! I could feel the pain of the mother and the teenage girl. Great ending!
Laury
02/02/08
Wow, I didn't see that coming! Good job.
Wow, that's quite a twist. I wasn't expecting that ending, nice job! A few tips for this piece, instead of telling us that she is redheaded, later you mention her lovely red hair-so you could skip that part next time, don't "tell" when you can "show". ^_^
02/05/08
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Very good illustration of the topic. The ending took me by surprise and was pretty powerful. Nice job!
Yikes ~ surprise ending! Good snapshot of a divorced family ~ I want to know more about all of them!