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11/18/06
Very nice! She is truly a Prodigal Daughter. This is a touching story. Nice job.
11/18/06
What a wonderful tale of a prodigal brought home! I love that you didn't tell what she'd been doing - makes this applicable to anyone! Keep writing.
11/19/06
I love stories that tap into the wisdom of the elderly.

Some of your dialog seemed a bit stilted, perhaps, but that's easy to edit.

Great characters, and a lovely story.
11/22/06
Your intro paragraph set the lovely mood of this story. I always love a prodigal story. This one is unique in that it is of a granddaughter returning to her grandmother. This story is nicely written but could perhaps be tightened up a bit. I enjoyed this story and hope that it will reach others who need to hear its message. Great job!
11/22/06
Oh, this was wonderful. It seemed so genuine and real. Great job at capturing the emotions of the situation.
Amy? Good Job. I think a lot of people waiting for someone to 'come home' could identify with the grandma.