The Official Writing Challenge
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Well done, i enjoyed your story.
01/23/06
Very creative! One note: when using "Father" or "Dad" as a character's name, captialize. And be careful of to / too. I like your use of the less common meaning of the word "start." Good job!
01/23/06
Very creative! One note: when using "Father" or "Dad" as a character's name, captialize. And be careful of to / too. I like your use of the less common meaning of the word "start." Good job!
01/23/06
Very creative! One note: when using "Father" or "Dad" as a character's name, captialize. And be careful of to / too. I like your use of the less common meaning of the word "start." Good job!
01/23/06
I have no idea why that happened...I only typed it once....
01/24/06
Really cute story!! Just a few changes maybe...I would drop 'the' in "THE several other'. I also think you could drop 'nearer' in 'rushed nearer toward'. See what you think. LOVED the ending!!
I was hooked on this from the first sentance - wonderful story and the writing, though in need of a little polishing, was captivating. Well done and God bless.
Very very cute and really an unusual viewpoint--from an ant. I'm not sure of the religious implications, but is a cute story.
01/27/06
I wonder if you mean fire ants? They sting! Cute story and I figured out it was ants just before I reached the end. Suggest: watch to/too, read carefully for verb/subject agreement. Nice overall & attention holding.
01/30/06
You sure got my attention all the way through. I knew something was up, just had to read through it to find out what the surprise ending might be. Very witty! Just a few edits to check over, but wow! really cute. God bless ya, littlelight