The Official Writing Challenge
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01/24/06
You've got a great rhyme scheme, and a nice lesson. Be careful of your / you're, and work on more consistent meter (the same number of stressed and unstressed syllables for each line). Keep up the good work!
01/30/06
I agree the poem is good, and needs just a little bit of attention with a few details like "u" for "you."
Don't rush through, take UR time, and this would be perfect! Keep writing! God bless ya, littlelight