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By Cyril Almond
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I know what it is like to be a black sheep. My Mother gave me away to my Grandmother when i was three weeks old. The only explanation for this was that she was so tired and could not cope. She then went on to have another seven children after me. So as you can imagine when i got older i could not understand this one. To be quite honest i did not go into it in detail.
My Father was a fisherman as was my Grandfather. This meant that both of them were away at sea for long periods. Until my Grandathers health forced him to come ashore. It was only then that i had a man in the house full time.
What a lovely man he was and as i got to know him i realized how fortunate i was to have him. The same applied to my Grandmother who was a very caring person. She was mum to a lot of people including me, she did her best for everybody.
It was at times like Christmas that i used to think about my situation. Presents were very few and far between. As my brothers and sisters would come up and see their Grandmother and bring presents with them that i would feel left out.Often the comment was made by people as i got older that i must be the black sheep. Allthough i did not take that on board the thought used to linger at times.
I then went on to do my national service. Which my brothers did not do because they were fisherman and were exempt. So once again i was set apart as i did not go to sea like them. But a little later on in my life i met this Jesus who said my sheep know my voice. He went further he said i would be washed as white as snow. I was no longer set apart, no longer the black sheep. I was accepted warts and all. He said he would never leave me and that settled it for me.
Later on in life i came to serve him as a pastor and i came across a lot of so called black sheep. If you have been there and worn the tee shirt you know what this is about. I know the voice of Jesus, the Holy Spirit talks to me and i am no longer a black sheep! Amen.
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Make sure you do a good proofread. At first I thought the lowercase i was a stylistic choice, showing the MC was not important enough, but then in the end, when the MC found Jesus, I would have expected it to be capitalized. Words like Grandmother and Mom only should be capped if using as a name, but if you use the word my or the before then it should be lowercase.
You told a touching story that many can relate to. I think a lot of people feel like an outsider. Good job and nice message.
Thanks for sharing.
God bless~
My little input, be super careful with grammar next time around. Watch for sentence fragment such as this one: "As my brothers and sisters would come up and see their Grandmother and bring presents with them that i would feel left out." A possible re-write could be: "It was when my brothers and sisters would come up and see our grandmother and brought presents with them, that I would feel left out." Be consistent with the tense and punctuation. Also put your "I" in capital, it doesn't matter where in a sentence they turn up.
You did a very good job ending on a positive note. It's great to know that even if we have been classified as out-cast, when Jesus walks into our lives we become His sons and daughters.
I have a feeling this article took some doing to publish being so personal. You put yourself into it so we felt it with you.
God can use our whole person for his Glory. Coming to obey Jesus after all your past brings glory to God. Your life lived for Jesus does the same in spite of your past.
good article.