The Official Writing Challenge
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This is quite lovely. O like how you take the reader from the dark into hope and the light, Nice job of writing on topic too.
04/28/13
I love this! "With one click His fingers formed me" is a line that will stay with me. Absolutely beautiful poem I will read again. Thank you for sharing your fine talent and words.
This poem resonated with me in a very deep way. There is something in my life that I wish I could just click my fingers and have it solved, but that isn't the way life works. Thank you for this beautiful reminder that God is forming us, and He is in control.
You render reality exquisitely . . .
04/29/13
The poem is beautiful and it drew me in while reading and formed an image in my mind of what it would like to be the one in control of my own life but you left us with the perfect answer that God is in control of our lives and His way is the perfect way for us in every sense of the word.
I enjoyed your poem. Great message within. It would be wonderful if we could snap our fingers and cause all our problems to vanish. Matter of fact, there are a few that I would like to "vanish" right now. But the Lord is much wiser than I and He tends to use those "problems" to shape me.

Thankfully, all of our problems are temporary, and some day, in the twinkling of an eye... the problems will vanish and all we will see is Him!

Thanks for writing this. Blessings.
I loved the whole idea here of the fact that it has to be the Lord who is doing the planning. I particularly liked the last 4 stanza's. In the second to the last one though, I would use the word they instead of it, I think it flows better when it is read aloud. That is just my personal opinion as a poet. Yet I know how particularly subjective poetry can be so take that with a grain of salt. This fit the topic beautifully. My favorite stanza that you wrote (can't remember which one) reminded me of Psalm 100 in the KJV where it says, ..."It is God who made us, and not we ourselves..." Blessings to you.
I re-read and if the it were changed to they then "impacts" would also need to be changed to impact.
04/29/13
creation is the "it" that "impacts"...you are gramatically correct...
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem from start to finish.
God is in control - what a wonderful message that brings great peace. I really enjoyed the flow of this poem and its soothing message - the words matching the theme seamlessly.
05/02/13
Simply lovely!
Congratulations for ranking 25 overall!