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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Achoo (04/11/13)

TITLE: The Cure
By Melinda Bozak
04/18/13


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Jenny Leadway could not believe that the WCVC had so persistently courted her until she agree to take their very generous offer. They had no idea, though she played hard to get, that in fact she World Center for Virus Control was the place she was hoping to eventually work. Not in her wildest dreams did she ever think she would be beginning her career there. She had every reason to be proud. – “Achoo.” … Jenny thinks to herself, “I must be coming down with something.”

She worked so hard to put herself through college. At times working three jobs to fund her studies, she struggled to fight the weight of her heavy eyelids as she listened attentively to the professors' lectures. All that work and sacrifice would finally pay off. The center extended a very lucrative offer. She was happy to be one of the 'haves' for a change. – “Achoo” … Again she ponders, “my immune system must be down.”

“Hello Dr. Leadway. We're glad to have you on board. Have a seat. We're discussing the fascinating discovery we are involved in developing.”

Jenny's stomach was filled with butterflies. The moment Dr. Fallacy addressed her as 'doctor' the butterflies were gone and she felt like she was rising in a hot air balloon. “Achoo”

“We have been studying the human conscience and have discovered the element that controls the sense of right and wrong! The study has been going on for years but we are approaching the edge of creating a serum to cure undesirable behaviors....without causing a single undesirable side affect!” The doctor is so excited that she can hardly contain her euphoria.

Dr. Fallacy continues, “This center – this TEAM, will be remembered in history for finding the cure for 'sin'.. for lack of a better word.” – “Achoo”

Jenny's Christian upbringing quickly caused questions as to the possibility of such a serum. She shifted uncomfortably in her seat as she listened to the project her 'team' was working on.

Dr. Leadway's tone changes suddenly. She hangs her head and looks to the floor as if she has been defeated. “'The challenge we have now is to modify the serum.”

“I don't understand. I thought you've found a cure. Why would it need nodification?” the naïve young doctor asks.

“I said there were no 'undesirable' side affects. There aren't for the recipient. However, once it is taken the serum is irreversible. – Therefore it is not profitable. It would eventually eliminate the need for production.” – “Achoo”

Jenny stands as she boldly speaks out, ' I thank you for this offer. However, I will have to decline. I know of only one 'cure' for sin – Jesus Christ. By attempting to control the effectiveness you have proven that the need for a cure will never be eliminated. However, I cannot be part of a team that is promoting a lie.”

Dr. Leadway walks out suddenly feeling much better.

Acts 4:12
There is salvation in no one else! God has given no other name under heaven by which we must be saved.”


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Vince Martella04/21/13
I loved the idea behind this story! Very well done. One bit of crit - try to stay in one tense when telling your story (Jenny bounces from past to present). Other than that, I really enjoyed this piece. Excellent!
Beth LaBuff 04/23/13
I always enjoy a bit of speculative fiction. You didn't disappoint with your creativity. The names you chose for your characters were quite fascinating. Thanks!
Judith Gayle Smith04/24/13
I love this . . .
Christina Banks 04/25/13
Thank you for stepping out of your comfort zone and writing this bit of fiction for us.
lynn gipson 04/25/13
You should step out of your comfort zone more often.. You have a gift for fiction and creativity. Loved this story and the very strong message it sends. Especially the last line.

God is so good!

Thanks for sharing this wonderful story!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/26/13
Congratulations on ranking 13 in your level! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)