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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Note (02/07/13)

TITLE: Friends Don't Let Friends Drive Drunk
By clarissa aguilera
02/14/13


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Rene and Carmen were best friends, growing up together as toddlers, met for the first time in preschool. Went off to grammar school, all of junior high, “graduated junior high”, went to college together, and took the same courses, “they were inseparable.”

They were a perfect pair of aces. Perfect, but very different, Carmen was the ace of spades vs. Rene the ace of hearts.

As the years went by, Rene sensed an attitude and a spirit of frustration Carmen was constantly carrying. She felt something deep down in the pit of her stomach, “she knew something was terribly wrong.

Who she was hanging around with, and how she would address the situation, was more of a concern for Rene. Afraid of losing her best friend, she prayed to God:

“Father you are a God of miracles, “I claim it in the name of Jesus”, restore back to me my relationship with Rene and may you strengthen the bond between her and I, “touch her now Lord” that she may come back to her senses.

Thank you Lord. (1CORINTHIANS 15:33-34) NIV Do not be misled: “Bad company corrupts good character. Come back to your senses as you ought, and stop sinning; for there are some who are ignorant of God- I say this to your shame.

Rene a very wise woman, who has the spirit of discernment; she could detect danger from a mile away. She decided to bring it out into the light (PROVERBS 31:26) NIV She speaks with wisdom and faithful instruction is on her tongue. “Carmen is everything, ok?

“Yeah, everything’s fine. “Why?” “Does it look like something’s wrong?” “Carmen stated, sarcastically!”

Whenever I ask you a question or try and talk to you, “you totally ignore me”, you seem so distant the last couple of weeks.

What are you talking about!” shouted Carmen, “you’re so annoying!(GALATIANS 6:1-2) NIV Brothers, if someone is caught in a sin; you who are spiritual should restore him gently. But watch yourself, or you also may be tempted. Carry each other’s burdens, and in this way you will fulfill the law of Christ.

Continuing to shout, and annoyed by Rene’s question. Rene gently put her head down, with deep concern and compassion for Carmen she took a deep sigh, then let it out and said “I apologizes if I said something that hurt you; “those were not my intentions.”(2 CORINTHIANS 3:7) NIV Now instead, you ought to forgive and comfort him, so that he will not be overwhelmed by excessive sorrow.

Rene, I just want you to take note on how far apart you are drifting away from me, “boldly, I tell the truth and you get angry. The truth, “is, what, it is”! And one day you will appreciate my word of wisdom (PROVERBS 2:6) NIV for the Lord gives wisdom, and from his mouth comes knowledge and understanding.

Carmen you’re a very mature intelligent young woman, I encourage you to think about thing’s.

“Rene, you know I have mad respect for you and I love you very much. I would never let anything come between us.
I appreciate you coming at me straight up and out! I will take your word into consideration. I just got a lot on my plate, “I guess hanging out with the wrong crowd isn’t helping.

"Your turning into a monster."

Carmen, I’m not going to preach to you because you know already. You just have to trust God completely (PROVERBS 3:5) NIV Trust in the Lord with all your heart and lean not on your own understanding

I understand all that, but it’s not that easy… Rene.

“It is when you trust him”.

Ha! Ha! You’re funny.

“Error, I’m not trying to be funny Carmen, that’s just real talk!

Okay, okay, I get it, be strong and courageous, Right?

Right!

“Okay, soldier I salute you.

“I’ll take that as a compliment, thank you.”

I really appreciate the real talk, Thanks.

Rene said, don’t trip, potato chip, that’s what friends are for; “friends don’t let friends, drive drunk.”


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Tricia Nechibvute02/18/13
I liked the story line. It is good to know that there are friends that will fight for each other. It would have been so easy to cut her loose. This is a measure of how much you love a person. This is an expression of the unconditional love that God has for us even at our most trying and challenging he weathers the storm with us.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/19/13
You have the basics for a great story here: two vibrant characters, a conflict, a way to work through, and scriptures to rely on.

You did have some problems with the mechanics like knowing when and where to place the quotation marks. By adding some action with dialog that will help pull the story together. Also with fiction you may want to use the Bible verses at the end.

You do a nice job of getting your message through. It's important for friends to look out for one another. Keep writing.