The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked the story line. It is good to know that there are friends that will fight for each other. It would have been so easy to cut her loose. This is a measure of how much you love a person. This is an expression of the unconditional love that God has for us even at our most trying and challenging he weathers the storm with us.
You have the basics for a great story here: two vibrant characters, a conflict, a way to work through, and scriptures to rely on.

You did have some problems with the mechanics like knowing when and where to place the quotation marks. By adding some action with dialog that will help pull the story together. Also with fiction you may want to use the Bible verses at the end.

You do a nice job of getting your message through. It's important for friends to look out for one another. Keep writing.