The Official Writing Challenge
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02/17/13
Beautifully written story about the challenges we can face but if we put our trust in God, we can fly and soar.

I really learned a great deal about butterflies and what an Entomologist does.

Thank you for sharing your gift of writing with us.
I absolutely love this! What a brilliant idea and I loved the subtle humor in the girl's name. So on topic and in more than one way.

I think this would make a great kids story. The only thing I would change is instead of Dad having the epiphany, have the kid come to that conclusion. One of the mistakes kids' publishers have noted that adult authors make is to have the adult resolve the conflict. It's great to have an adult guide the kids and be a good example, but most publishers prefer kids do the problem solving.

With that said, I still think it's a bit of genius. This allegory is such a perfect fit. We all need to strive to climb towards the Son and open our wings. Great job with this story. It's one of my favorites for sure.
02/21/13
Congrats. God bless~