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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Blessed (10/11/12)

TITLE: blessed am I
By Christine Prater
10/17/12


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blessed am I
that you'd suffer and die
your sweet hands offered love as they bled
for the price that you paid
on that fateful day
should have been me instead

how I wish I could touch
the face that gave so much
take away all the shame and the scorn
all the bruises and blood
the nails and the mud
and your crown of victory; thorns

battered and hung,
on the day grace begun
your sacrifice set the world free
risen again
a new spirit within
your resurrection made new life for me

glory redeemed
hopeless, it at first seemed
on that day you were unjustly tried
now joy is renewed
for what can I not do
when I have your spirit inside

savior and friend
beginning and end
my tears fall like rain as I kneel
blessed am I
that you'd suffer and die
for by those same wounds, I am healed


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Colin Swann10/19/12
The worth of Jesus and what he did, written in rhyme. Truly wonderful - praise Him!

Colin (Gold Member)
lynn gipson 10/19/12
BEAUTIFUL! Your love for Christ is so evident and this beautiful poem touched my heart and soul. Very good.

God Bless
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/19/12
This is pure poetry! It definitely packs a powerful punch. What a wonderful truth to know that if Jesus could only save just one person whether it be you or me or some horrible person, he still would have gone through all of that agony because he loves each and every one of us unconditionally and that much.

Tiny red ink in this line: on the day grace begun it should be began but that wouldn't fit the rhyme but if you added had begun then it's correct. I'm not great at hearing meter and rhythm so perhaps adding the had would have changed the flow.

You did a great job of writing on topic. There have been way more poems this week because blessed seems to demand a beautiful poem and you definitely wrote a beautiful one. The ending really touched me too. These lines: my tears fall like rain as I kneel
blessed am I
that you'd suffer and die
for by those same wounds, I am healed
Though there I noticed a switch in tense and if you had just written kneeled it would have kept the tense as well as rhymed better with healed. Now technically the past tense of kneel is knelt not kneeled but in poetry you can get away with that a bit more. I'm sure it's something you agonized over and the choice you made is a good one. The most important part is the affect it had on me and so many others. You are truly blessed with a talent for writing and I left this piece with a warm feeling and am honored to have read it. It will have an effect on people in ways you may never know. Keep writing those words that God lays upon your heart
And to this poem I say AMEN!
CD Swanson 10/24/12
such a beautiful poem, I enjoyed it so much. But more than that...your heart for God which is so evident in your words. Thank you.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/25/12
Congratulations for placing third in level one and 20 overall!