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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Appointment (02/09/12)

TITLE: Johnny B. Tardy
By Pam Ford Davis
02/13/12


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Johnny B.Tardy was a natural born slowpoke; he was born three weeks past his delivery date.

As a young boy, he over slept repeatedly and the school principal reprimanded him.

The coach gave the star athlete detention because he was late for the state championship game.

Johnny hurriedly slipped into his graduation cap and gown before joining his annoyed class on stage.

The Army recruiter demanded punctuality for Monday’s 7am induction. Traffic detained John.

As a prospect for employment, he had an appointment for 8am sharp. He was positive it was set for nine.

Johnny promised to meet Jill at 6pm for dinner and a movie. She dinned alone.

He reserved the wedding chapel for 2pm. Jill fumed as the organist stalled with three performances of Oh Promise Me while waiting for Johnny to take his place at the altar.

Jill's labor pains were five minutes apart when EMT staff transported her by ambulance to the hospital. Johnny promised to be there in plenty of time. He missed the delivery of John Jr.

The years from cradle to the grave passed much too quickly as Johnny proved: “Time waits for no man.”

The attending physician said Johnny would not live through the night. Family watched and waited …

“He’ll be late for his own funeral!”

The obituary announcement listed 10am for the start of his funeral service. As friends arrived, they found the funeral already in progress with only family present.

People waited for Johnny all of his life. This time they missed the appointed time!

Johnny met with God as scheduled…

“And as it is appointed for men to die once, but after this the judgment (Hebrews 9:27 NKJ).”


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Camille (C D) Swanson 02/16/12
Interesting and clever story. Right on topic. And, nicely done. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/18/12
This was different. I found myself giggling a few times.

You did all telling instead of showing but the stilted sentences did add to the point you were making. I noticed a few typos like dinned instead of dined.

This was different but appealing in an odd way. I like how you applied the verse in a fun way. This verse has been quoted a lot this week, but you used it in a fun way.
Donna Wilcher 02/18/12
Love the message!
Theresa Santy 02/19/12
Fun, amusing, and enjoyable. I'm not sure why the piece was presented with each sentence standing alone. Perhaps this was a style choice and mostly, it worked, but a couple of times I fell out of the piece, wanting a little bit more transistion in between the separated thoughts. (Ironically, I've been criticized for this very same thing--lack of transition).

I thought this was a clever, unique, and fresh take on the topic, and I absolutely loved the play on the MC's name.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/23/12
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level 1!
Dannie Hawley 02/24/12
Very clever and fun to read! Good take-away message.