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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Cyber Communication (email, IM’s, etc) (11/04/10)
He dragged me from my comfy chair
Away from books and knitting
Before a bland computer screen
The young man has me sitting

I have a wireless keyboard and
A hundred keys for pressing
Letters, numbers, arrows all
It’s really most depressing

He opened up the email and
I have a new address
My name with dots and dashes is
A mystery…I confess

He made me write a message
Just to say “How do you do?”
He made me send my message
And it’s on its way to you

He made me send a photo of
A sunny seaside scene
Just mind when you receive it
It’s a place I’ve never been

A black suspicious webcam sits
Close by and winks at me
Apparently you switch yours on
My wrinkled face to see!

A little flag is blinking in
The corner of the screen
It says I have a message and
RIGHT NOW it must be seen

I’m glad to read that you are well
Your op – a fine success
That when we’re done with playing here
You’re off to buy a dress

I s’pose the folk from Merrylands
Have had a fine old time
Our minds need constant stimulus
Our bodies past their prime

The government can tick its box
Into the “web” we’ve crawled
But to this world of cyber space
I know I am not called

I have to say the biscuits here
Are actually quite nice
A piled plate of custard creams
Much more than would suffice



Author’s Note: A recent Government-sponsored scheme “Get On Line” was aimed at getting people online and encouraging others to use the internet more. It included free computer courses and other short training events.
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Date
Beth LaBuff 
11/13/10
I could just see this poor soul being urged to go online. This line just made me smile, "I’m glad to read that you are well -- Your op – a fine success..." This is super creative and so much fun!
Henry Clemmons
11/13/10
Smooth, clever, unique and very well done, and a great message and story to tell. Enjoyed it all. I liked the rhythm, rhymes and meter.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
11/13/10
A cleverly written poem with a message. Good work.
Philippa Geaney 
11/14/10
I agree! It is a fun poem and very clever. The slightly rollicking rhythm brings out the smile yet it has a poignant undertone. Like a good wine.
Caitlyn Meissner
11/14/10
I could feel the writer's reluctance to be on a computer. This was fun to read. :)
Catrina Bradley
11/16/10
Your meter is spot on, and the story flows naturally through the stanzas. The last stanza seems misplaced to me - I wonder if you meant to end with "I am not called." ? Just a thought. I really loved this poem - you drew me in from the first, and made me want to read on to the end.
Rachel Phelps
11/16/10
Fun story!
Susan Montaperto
11/17/10
I loved the title! A very enjoyable read. Thank you. God bless your writing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
11/17/10
This is great. I love a nice chuckle and your words flow so smoothly.
Barbara Culler 
11/17/10
Entertaining story!
Somewhat confused at the end-is the MC in a nursing home?

Story is so true of people today who don't want to participate but are being "highly" encouraged."
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
11/18/10
Congratulations for placing 15th in level 4 and 24th overall!