The Official Writing Challenge
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You made some compelling points. You did a good job with the scripture too. I wished you'd put what translation you were quoting from. I've never seen Noah written as Noe before.

You do have several incomplete sentences (fragment)Having someone proof your work before you submit it, could help a lot. You also might want to check out Jan's writing basics in the forums. She's helped me with the mechanics quite a bit.

Your love for the Lord and your passion really shines through. Keep it up!
Reads like a meaningful and passionate devotional. The writer's heart shines through!
I agree with the previous critique as to using Jan's writing basics for mechanics and possibly having a friend proof read your work.
08/23/10
I like the devotional part. I agree, some mechanics would help the flow. The son's understanding was cute. Keep writing!