The Official Writing Challenge
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You have a wonderful message to tell. The way your story was set up was a little confusing and I found I needed to reread a few times. I think if you told it in a more traditional way it would be easier to read.You did a great job of pulling me in I felt so much empathy for you. I know the frustration of going to doctor to doctor to find out what is wrong. Keep writing.
I liked the headings in your story, but it would have been clearer if you had used caps or bold to set them apart. I also like the way you used your experiences to make the point at the end.