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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Wow! (03/11/10)
"Mommy, come look!" Bounce. "You gotta come see." Bounce bounce. "Come on Mommy, Get up," bounce, "get up," bounce, "get up!"

Grrr. Seriously, God? My grand plan to sleep in on my Saturday off had been thwarted. It appeared my exuberant five-year old was causing a small earthquake in the region of MaBedville.

I pulled the covers over my head and growled for real. "What little Bear is bouncing on Mamma Bear's bed?" My attempt at a roar was cut off when Beatrice squealed and plopped her entire 24 pounds on top of me.

"MomMY! Come ON!" She yanked at the covers, eliciting a wrestling match that, of course, I let my Beatle-Bear win. How could I not? Losing meant I got to look upon those big brown eyes swimming inside that swarming halo of golden tresses.

"Why?" I whined, "I don't wanna get up. Come on, snuggle with me, Beatle-Bear." I tried to pull her into a spoon, but she wouldn't have it.

"No, Mommy, you gotta come see. I found you a wow."

She hopped off the bed and tugged on my hand until I tumbled after her with a flop and let her drag me to her room. She pranced to the window and pointed. "See? See the wow?"

I stood beside her and gazed out at the morning. The sun had just peeped over the trees, painting a pastel backdrop on the sky, and dew sparkled like a web of diamonds spun over creation. God had, indeed, painted a wow.

I ran my hand over her tousled hair. "Thank you for showing me the sunrise, Beatrice. That's a pretty good wow." I bent down and kissed the top of her head, stifling a yawn.

"NO, Mommy, over there. See?" She was jumping up and down and pointing past me to the right.

I sidled over to stand behind her so I could see what her pudgy little finger was pointing at.

"See the wow?"

"Oh, wow! Yeah, Bea-Bea, I do, now."

I pulled her warm little body into my arms and was hypnotized by the sight. A dancing prism of colors spanned the dew-bejeweled trees at the side of the yard, creating a glittery rainbow across windbreak.

My little Beatle-Bear spun around to face me. "You always show me the wows, Mommy. I wanna show you this time, kay?"

She grabbed my hand again and twisted around to point out the window again. "Now, look, Mommy. See it? Wow! It's the raimbove God's promise." She turned and looked up. "Now, I'm gonna pray just like you do, 'kay? Bow your head, Mommy." She took my other hand and watched to make sure I followed her command.

Tears dripped onto the front of my rumpled sleepshirt as my little one led me in prayer for the first time.

"Dear God, Thank you for wows. Thank you for raimboves and for promises and for loving us. Thank you for Mommy. Please tell Daddy I love him. And thank you for Jesus. Amen."

Wow, God. I snuffled in and swallowed. That's my girl. That's Your girl. Thank you.

I squeezed her hands. "Dear God, Thank you painting beautiful sunrises and rainbows for us, because sometimes we need a "wow" to remind us how very much you love us. Thank you for Beatrice, God, my precious little Beatle-Bear. Please take care of Daddy. And thank you for Jesus and for our home with You in Heaven, the forever treasure at the end of your rainbow. Amen."

***

"Whenever the rainbow appears in the clouds, I will see it and remember the everlasting covenant between God and all living creatures of every kind on the earth."
Genesis 9:16 (NIV)
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Jackie Wilson
03/18/10
So joyful and uplifting! I could see it all. Beautiful!
Allison Egley 
03/22/10
Oh my gosh. Too cute! I loved "MaBedville" and "raimbov" and "beatle bear."
Lori Othouse 
03/22/10
So sweet, but deep with meaning. As we try to teach them, the little ones often teach us. Loved it!
Sarah Elisabeth
03/22/10
Awww, this had such a good snuggly feel. I loved little Beatle Bear, her prayer was the best wow.
Beth LaBuff 
03/22/10
I love your ultra-creative title. Your miniature MC warmed her way into my heart too. :) I love how the mother looked for "Wows!" in creation to share with her daughter! I'm still smiling over this!
Nicole Campbell
03/22/10
This was a beautiful story. I loved your mini MC and her cute nature. Well done with your descriptions. This story really held me captive the whole way through. Excellent writing!
Gregory Kane
03/22/10
A delightful, homely tale. I easily could identify with the being woken up in the morning feeling
Laury Hubrich 
03/22/10
Wow- so cute.
william price
03/22/10
What a sweet, sweet tender, loving story written very well. Enjoyed every line. Loved the "wows". A great word to teach a young one. Way kool.
God bless.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
03/22/10
I loved this!--sleepy mom, delightful child, and beautiful descriptions of God's wows.
Ann Stocking
03/22/10
What a "bouncy" and cheerful story... And a sweet reminder of God's glory in the everyday. Great title.
Loren T. Lowery
03/22/10
You managed to capture the true meaning of the word in this captivating tableau. I was caught up in the moment, nodding my head, yes. Simply delightful!
Eliza Evans 
03/22/10
Great title and so many lovely, homey touches throughout. The nicknames, the easy humor, the warmth between mother and daughter and the bit of poetic prose describing the "wow" scene.

All marks of a true writer. :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/22/10
This is sweet and tugs at my heart.
Carol Slider 
03/23/10
This is so sweet, gentle and genuine! The unspoiled enthusiasm of a child is a thing to be treasured (even if it does mean waking up a little earlier than you'd intended!). Loved it!
Rachel Phelps
03/23/10
Lovely!
Sandra Petersen
03/24/10
You had such beautiful descriptions from what Beatrice looked like to the "rainbove" (what a clever word!) she showed her mother. This was excellent.
Sara Harricharan
03/24/10
I have to giggle at "rainboves" that's just too darling! Fun read and I loved the mother/daughter interaction. Wonderful!
Patricia Turner 
03/25/10
Loooove this little girl! You really captured a five year old's view here. From the mouths of babes, eh? Lovely story.
Mona Purvis
03/25/10
Sweet, fulfilling slice of life story that makes one smile along. Good job.

Mona
Benjamin Graber
06/29/11
Awww... What a sweet story! Thank you for sharing, Cat!