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Who thot it quite unique
To walk her dog
In “London” fog
A task - not hard - in Eek..
One day, the young lady - dressed up - oh - so - sheik - when along her way - to her dismay - a soldier lay asleep.
“Oh my,” said she, “what shall I do? To pass by him, surely he’d wake? Please dear Lord , guide my way - to wake him may be a mistake.”
Following closer upon him she noticed a bleeding side - “Oh, dear,” said she, “this poor man needs aid or he’ll surely die.”
Turning aside she returned to her home where help she knew she could find - for in her home the people there loved her and were kind.
“Come quickly,” said she, “a soldier is bleeding and surely needs our aid.”
It did not matter to them that were there that the feast prepared would fade.
They knew from God’s Word they had hid in their heart-
How to do and perform their part.
Each quickly dawned a wrap
And fastened with a snap
Made way to the place
About a hundred pace
To the side of the soldier
Lying on his face.
“There he is,” said she, “surely he’s still alive. Ah, yes, tis true, his wound has turned blue, we must hurry, lest he die.”
“Yes, fetch the long wood”, said the elder- we have extra wraps - perhaps.”
The young men obeyed and quickly made a stretcher of wood and wraps.
“Ever so gently,” the elder said.
As they lifted him to the stretcher.
“Now, slowly and steadily, my young lads,
We’ll make our way down together.”
The town was alight as the sun was setting
“Come quickly”, the doctor motioned.
“Set him there, “ and with great care,
They followed with devotion..
Is he going to be okay?” asked she
“We’ll have to wait til morn, said he.
Come, sit by the fire with me,”
As he handed each a cup of tea.
The morning broke, each awoke, the soldier he awoke too.
They had prayed all night
Til dawn’s early light
And the Joy of the Lord each new!
FYO: There is a town in Alaska named Eek.
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I enjoyed your playing around with different kinds of poetry, but it felt a little bit disjointed to me. Maybe if you alternated between limerick, quatrain, couplet in a systematic pattern, it'd have a smoother flow.
Your verse had a great lesson, and you obviously put a lot of work into it!