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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: Happy, Stumped and Bummed
By AnneRene' Capp
02/04/10


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Ohhh – How I Enjoy

Holidays
Surprises
Vacations
Barbeques
The rainbow
Ocean breezes
A toddler’s giggle
A warm spring day
All Critters – no bugs
Snuggling with my pets
The smell after a first rain
Crystal clear swimming pools
The warm embrace of a loved one
A pat on the back for a job well done
Thunder storms in the middle of summer
Being able to pay ALL of my bills…on time :)
Ohhh…And most definitely when a person gives their life to the Lord!


Ohhh - I Don’t Know What To Say When:

I didn’t get the joke
Nobody got MY joke funny :(
I got the joke….just didn’t find it funny
I didn’t pay attention to what my boss just told me and he asks my opinion
I receive a gift from someone who can’t wait for me to open it… that SO isn’t me


Ohhh – What a Bummer!

Finding kitty hairballs – on my bed
Getting pulled over for a traffic violation
Just missing that PERFECT parking spot
The mailman came – and I didn’t get a thing
My sneezes come in groups of four - at a recital
When my dog doesn’t make it outside to throw up
When I produce a rubber roast for first time guests
Locking myself out of the house without a spare key
Missing the banks deposit cut off time by ONE minute
Tossing out the receipt for a 50lb bag of dog food that doesn’t agree with my dog
Home alone and “somebody” neglected to replace the toilet paper stored in the hallway!


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Delores McCarter02/11/10
This is cute, but I was unclear what type of prose this was. I'm guessing a free-verse poem but was not certain.
Verna Mull02/11/10
I agree, this was a real cute idea to meet the challenge. I'm not sure of the style, either, but that's not surprising. I am stuck in a rut!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/15/10
It was an unique way to write. I enjoyed how you covered all the different ways to translate ohh. Keep writing.
Jan Ackerson 02/16/10
I enjoyed this very much--there was something on each of the three levels that I could relate to. No bugs! A very fun entry.
Kate Oliver Webb02/16/10
This was a fun entry--even the "unknown" styling added to the fun. Very creative take on the topic, and I'm glad you did it.
Amanda Brogan02/17/10
I like how the words and sentences grow longer with each line. Creative way to write it! It kind of makes anticipation for what's next grow with the words. :) Interesting style!
Jackie Wilson02/17/10
Creative and fun!
Margaret Kearley 02/18/10
Love this Holly! Really great! Can identify with many of those!
Jacob Gibson02/18/10
Hey AnneRene'. It's nice to meet you. Thanks for the critique and going through such a long chapter. I agree with you that I have too much information about starting a band than I need, and I'm trying to decide how to summarize and simplify. I'd like to know why you felt like the chapter is flat and how I could unflatten it. :)

Ha! What a riot. I thoroughly enjoyed this short work of quirky thoughts and feelings. The first part with the stair-like lines was pretty cool. I think all of us can find things to relate to in this. Sometimes it's nice to find something short and fun to read. Thanks and God bless!
Jacob Gibson02/18/10
Oh yeah, and I completely know how it feels when someone doesn't think a joke you tell is funny. I can hear something I find hilarious and when I repeat it to someone else they just roll their eyes or don't get it. Oh well. We can't all appreciate British humor or random nonsense.
Francy Judge 02/27/10
I really enjoyed this funny and creative entry.


   
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