The Official Writing Challenge
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01/22/10
Indeed what a wonderful Father we do have. I'm glad she had a grandmother to comfort her. I've done that before though-gotten all dressed up for work, etc. on a holiday or weekend, only to realize my days are off. It always drives me nuts. Thanks for sharing.
01/23/10
Well written. I'm glad you did not let a grumpy grandpa cause you not to see God as loving.
01/25/10
This broke my heart!

You had words left over--I'd love to see this expanded, with more dialog and character development. It's a great beginning.
This was very well done. I enjoyed the little girl's stamina and strength.
That was a good recovery statement coming from a child! Great story!
01/26/10
This was very good. I could feel her pain and humiliation. But she was so brave!

Yes, our God is a great comfort!
A sweet little story; would make a good devotional with added scripture. Quick thinking (although dishonest) for a little girl!
01/26/10
Good use of a painful childhood experience to illuminate the love of God. I enjoyed this sweet story!
Poor little girl, I couldn't help but feel sorry for her. Adults can be so thoughtless at times. Good story. I like your honesty - none of us like to be wrong.
01/27/10
I loved this little girl, "spunky" is the perfect word for her. My sense is that she still is!! Lovely writing.
01/29/10
Shan, congrats on placing in Level 1!
03/29/10
I love the way you worked in some very good lessons. I could picture the little girl and really felt for her. Great job and congratulations on your good placement.