The Official Writing Challenge
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07/30/09
I like the feelings "through time" on this and wrapping the ending with the beginning. It has special meaning throughout.
An added critique would be to drop "Ruth" after the first introduction, makes it more personal and adds a little more "power" to the story. It was not distracting through and I would not have mentioned it except you asked for a critique.
Well written and there's obviously some good talent behind the writing.
God bless and keep serving Him.
07/30/09
This is a good story. I really liked the significance of the robin. I found it a bit hard at first to figure out what had happened to Grandma Ruth, but it's nothing too serious.
08/01/09
A sweet story whioh reminded me of my relationship with my own grandmother. Thanks for sharing.
Enjoyed your piece:) You've painted some very nice pictures for the reader. Keep writing!