The Official Writing Challenge
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12/04/08
Sweet essay!

Take a look at the first paragraph, where you've used "gifts" several times. Think about using synonyms in a few places, perhaps.

I'd also encourage you to use your full 750 words--some dialogue would be fun in this, or some specific Christmas memories.

Keep writing, you're doing a fine job!