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Topic: Christmas Gifts (11/13/08)
(This has been written as a carol. I will post the tune on the internet a little later.)


As the oceans condensed in a dew drop,
As the heavens encased in a gem;
So lies God wrapped up snug as a baby
In a crib in obscure Bethlehem.
As eternity caught in a heartbeat,
As all light filtered through a lone star;
So our God squeezes into our frailty,
The Creator steps down from afar.

See Him cross the unbridgeable chasm
To pay our impossible debt.
The immortal entangled in soft human flesh
Comes to share in our physical death.

The great mind which envisioned creation
Is void now and shrouded in mist.
Mighty hands which once fashioned the mountains
Are balled into miniature fists.
And that voice which called light into being
Now wordlessly whimpers and cries,
While the heart where true love had its birthplace
Beats in rhythm to soft lullabies.

See Him cross the unbridgeable chasm
To pay our impossible debt.
The immortal entangled in soft human flesh
Comes to share in our physical death.

Condescending to live in the shadows
He raises us to his marvellous light;
And in heeding the call to embrace him
We freely soar in his glorious might.
His magnificence transforms our frailties
As we yield to His beautiful Name.
Our weakness dissolves in his greatness
As his majesty strengthens our frame.

See Him cross the unbridgeable chasm
To pay our impossible debt.
In the child who stepped down from the courtyards of heav'n
All the yearnings of man now are met!
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Teresa Lee Rainey
11/24/08
This is worded so beautifully. Would love to hear the song. :)
Catrina Bradley
11/24/08
Your comparisons of God in the first stanza invoke deep emotion, making me see His coming as Christ in a whole new light (no pun intended). The second stanza is so beautiful, and makes me want to weep. I love this from beginning to end, the meter and rhymes near perfect and the sentiments heartfelt. So nice!
Clyde Blakely
11/27/08
Absolutely wonderfully told, Sharon. I agree with the above comments and would add this should have placed. This would be a wonderful hymn, if you have music to it I'd love to see it.
God bless and keep writing.
Sharon Kane
12/02/08
As promised, you can now listen to this modern Christmas carol by following this link:

http://kane.elim-moz.org/downloads/God_condensed/song.htm

Note however that the third verse has been revised following comments from other FW writers
Clyde Blakely
12/03/08
I encourage all who read this to listen to Sharon's song on the above link - it is well worth it! What a blessing!
Loren T. Lowery
12/03/08
This speaks to the heart as only something written from the heart can do. Even without melody it sings and it's true, "heard melodies are sweet, but those unheard are sweeter still." God bless you, your writing and your calling as you continue to share your gifts in song and in word. Loren
Linda Watson Owen
12/15/08
Sharon, I just discovered this by listening to your song. How beautiful! Your imagery is rich and deep..so vividly capturing the greatest gift this world has ever known. I love this wonderful song and poem! Thank you!!