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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Family Pet (05/15/08)

TITLE: BALI
By Sunny Loomis
05/18/08


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BALI




This small tortoiseshell kitten cost me all of six dollars at a pet shop. I
already had a name just waiting for a pet to tag it on. Her coloring was
mainly black with splashes of tan here and there. An evenly divided run
of the two colors descended the length of her nose. Not until I got her
home did I notice she had a few quirks. The vet confirmed she had brain
damage usually caused by the mother having a disease while pregnant.

It became obvious as Bali got older that her depth perception was off.
Id wave a toy in front of her face and shed bat at it and miss. She
learned when she wanted a drink of water to start lapping a couple of
inches above the water level, and then slowly lower her face until
her tongue hit water. Without this strategy her nose would submerge
and shed come up sputtering.

Her eyesight would also prevent her from jumping onto the couch.
Oh, shed try, but she usually bounced off the front. She couldnt
climb easily or safely jump off things.


Once or twice I planted grass seed in the bottom of a cardboard milk
carton just for her. Bali didnt quite get the concept of breaking off
blades of grass to chew. She liked the grass and would grab onto a
blade or two. Then she would proceed to carry the whole thing, the
grass clutched in her teeth, attached to the dirt in the carton, and the
carton itself, banging against her chest as she walked. Id end up
tearing off a few blades for her. She could mange that.

I decided to have Bali spayed when she was young as I didnt think she
would make a good mother. It was a rare event when she spent a night
away from home . The day after she was spayed my friend and I
picked her up at the vets office. The assistant brought Bali to me
who immediately wrapped her front legs around my neck as a child
would do, and loud purrs emanated from her throat. That was the
loudest I ever heard Bali purr.

Occasionally there were mice in the house. In this one area, Bali had
the patience of Job. Shed sit waiting for half an hour or more for
her chance. Life went on around her, but she was focused. It paid
off, as eventually I saw her with a mouse in her mouth. I always
wondered, with her eyesight how many mice she thought she saw,
and how she caught it. Id get her to let go of it, but then shed
go looking for it.

Bali was a runner of sorts, especially down the hallway in the house.
Shed get a burst of energy and take off. It was interesting to watch
her from behind. Her back end bounced at the same time she fishtailed
all the way down the hall. Sometimes her tail would whap the walls
on either side as she ran.

Once in awhile Id take Bali outside. She was an indoor cat but she liked
the outdoors. Id show her the harness and shed lie on her back so I
could buckle it around her belly. Shed show interest in all sorts of things.
She sniffed rocks and jumped at grasshoppers. Once in awhile shed
stalk a nearby bird.

Bali lived happily for thirteen years, and was very loving and the most
unique cat I ever had. She left a sweet lasting impression. It was the best
six dollars I ever spent.


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Yvonne Blake 05/22/08
(smile) I love your descriptions of Bali, and I'm still chuckling over her antics.
Keep it up...you're doing great.
Laury Hubrich 05/24/08
Very nice descriptions of your Bali. Nice job.
Laury
Debbie Wistrom05/26/08
The pace of this matched your precious cat. Loved the ending and this "immediately wrapped her front legs around my neck as a child
would do, and loud purrs emanated from her throat. That was the loudest I ever heard Bali purr."
Marlene Austin05/27/08
Great description of a wonderful, loving companionship. Your descriptions of Bali and her actions were full and rich. I was able to see her courageous attempts to do the things which were so difficult for her. :)
Jan Ackerson 05/27/08
A very sweet description--I could picture every moment.
Joshua Janoski05/29/08
Congratulations on taking 12th place in your level with this piece!
Elizabeth Hexberg07/16/08
We all have 'quirks'.
Bali sounded delightful.We have a kitten who's depth perception is also off.She tries to leap onto the computer keyboard, and misses everytime!
Nice writing.Thanks for sharing. God Bless.
Clyde Blakely 08/05/08
Wonderful description of a loving pet. Animals are sometimes a gift from God. They can bring so much pleasure. This story reminds me of a cat we had. Wonderful house cat with vision problems, she accidently got out one day and our neighbor killed it (one of many, many cats killed in the neighborhood). We grieved for it. We moved to the country just a short time later. Now we have five indoor/outdoor cats, safe now.
God bless and keep writing.
Marylea Monroe08/15/08
First I would like say thank you for your comments on my article "Where are you my child."

I must say I feel as though I know BALI. I like your discriptions and a feeling of warmth comes across with the antics and laughter. Nice job.

Meg
Helen Dowd 08/25/08
Oh how I loved this story! I also had a blind cat. The memory of her all came back as I read your story. This one was a WINNER in my estimation...If you want to read my story (it is in three parts, but you can get to it by going to the first story), here is the link. (Hope it works). Do Kitties Have Angels? If this link doesn't work, and you are interested, my email address is hmdowd@telus.net..God bless you today and every day...Helen
Helen Dowd 08/25/08
Hi. I already left a comment on "BALI", but I gave you the wrong story. (Sorry, I got up a little dizzy this morning!) I meant to give you this link, about my blind kitty: Purrfect Trust...Helen
Kingdom Citizen12/18/08
Great description...Great Adjectives used.
veronica cressey 05/21/09
Such a great commentary on Bali! I could imagine, through your words,how she lived!
Thank you so much!

Sincerely

Veronica
Carol Penhorwood 10/28/09
Silly me, this brought tears to my eyes! I love cats! Your descriptions brought this one alive to me.
Edy T Johnson 06/23/10
I came to thank you for the comment you left on my story "Something" (I'm way overdue!). And, I found this wonderful and touching story about your kitty. You are definitely a polished writer. Thank you!