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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: In The Darkness of the Night
By Jeryl Jasmine
07/26/07


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It is in the darkest hours of the night
That I have to battle with all my might
It is then when asense of gloom prevades
It doesn't care about the strides I've made
It opens all the old wounds that haven't healed
It's a mighty power that it wields
Digging Deep into old scars
Imprisoning me behind thick painful bars
But I refuse to listen to old tapes
I want to learn from my mistakes
I will never, never give in
No matter what it takes, this fight I must win
I will not let the gloom engulf me
I'll stand up and fight to be free

I have found someone to be my guide
He is always at my side
He loves me with all my hurt and pain
It was for me His son was slain
For me the crown of thorns was placed on His head
For me the sacrifical blood was shed
So with Him by my side I will take a stand
And fight the darkness with my hand in His hand


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Willa Maye08/02/07
Indeed! This poem addressed the need for Light to take away darkness, and the importance of staying encouraged.
christine bastow08/02/07
This is something that most struggle through at some stage in their life.
We have such a great God who walks with us through every battle so long as we hold His hand.
Chris
Emily Gillilan08/02/07
Even in the first lines, I felt the poem pushing to the powerful strength of Jesus at the end. I really like the last line.
Brenda Welc08/03/07
Well said. I liked the strenght in this poem.
Jan Ackerson 08/04/07
I like the metaphor of refusing to listen to old tapes. We all need to heed that!

If you work on this poem again, you might want to tweak it a bit for metrical consistency.

Thanks for sharing this testimony in verse.
Donna Emery08/05/07
Powerful and well-written. I loved the transition from sadness to joy through our Lord. Well done!
Anne Harrell08/07/07
Well written. I like how you put the light back on Christ.
Linda Roth08/30/07
Very powerful writing!
David (The Goliath Assassin)12/09/07
This is awesome too! I found myself wondering "so what is it this guy wants me to fix?" lol! (I usually only read critique circle poems, but you had so many that I chose your archives for my first sample instead.)

So the folly was mine, and I can honestly say that this poem needs no critique at all! Thanks for sharing, Jeryl.