The Official Writing Challenge
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This has to be one of the best stories I have read giving feedback on Mary. I felt a relationship with her reading this that I had never felt before and wanted to let you know I thought you did this wonderfully.
05/03/05
From the death at the cross, looking back to the birth. Good insight from a mother's perspective.
05/03/05
This is a great work - very moving...you have captured the hopefullness of a young girl's dreams and carried that hope through to portray a mother's worst nightmare. Yet, that light, that hope never quite leaves Mary. Great insight! Your first paragraph needs a little clean-up to clarify the wind and its effects. As you bring us back to the present moment where your story began you could come back to the wild wind blowing the hair... I think it would pull the beginning and the ending together. Can't wait to see more from you! Be blessed!
I love reading the story of the first Christmas, as a reflection from a greiving mother. Thank you.
Your write is a story spoken through a mother's heart filled with emotions. Very good job!