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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fire-fighter (10/05/06)

TITLE: What Daddy Does
By c clemons
10/11/06


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Last week Marshall’s six-year-old son Jeremy came home from school bursting with excitement. His first grade class had been given an assignment that he loved. The next week was going to be “Bring Your Dad to Class Day”, and the dads were to share with the class what they did for a living.

“It’s gonna to be fun Daddy! I already told Miss Fletcher what you do and she said that was good because there was gonna be some doctors and policemen but she didn’t think that your ‘occpation’ had been covered.”

“It’s ‘occ-u-pa-tion’ son.”

“What does ‘occ-u-pa-tion’ mean Daddy?”

“It’s the work Daddies and Mommies do, that provide for their families. It’s why they leave the house everyday, so that they can earn money that buys the food, clothing and these toys that you play with.” Marshall explained holding up one of the many trucks that were strewn around on the floor.

“But, Daddy you don’t leave everyday.”

“That’s right, I don’t, I have the kind of job that sometimes have unusual hours. I have to be on call when people need me. Sometimes it is in the middle of night, or when I really would like to be here with you and your mother. But I still think I have the best job in the world.”

“Yeah, I do too, and I wanna be just like you when I grow up” stated Jeremy.

Marshall felt his chest swell with pride as he smiled down at his little boy.

So, here he was sitting in the too little chair in his son’s classroom at the back of the room with the rest of the dads. He knew what he did for a living was important, in fact it was very important to society. But as he looked around, he hoped that his job would not be thought of as boring. There was actually a professional football player, a doctor, a lawyer and a yoga instructor, whom the kids had loved. (He could bend himself into a human pretzel).

His little Jeremy was beaming at him, like he had all the answers in the world. Jeremy’s classmates kept looking him at strangely and one little boy wanted to know “where is your ax?” Even Miss Fletcher had looked a little confused when he told her what his profession was. Oh well, he was next so he intended to do Jeremy proud.

Marshall walked to the front of the class with just a Bible in his hand, he told the class what had led him to become a preacher. He explained that he never chose it, but that he was chosen to preach the gospel to the lost and the hurting. He expounded on God’s love for the world and for each individual. He broke it down so wonderfully that even a six year old could understand. When he finished the class was so silent that Marshall thought he might have offended some. But then the dad that was the football player came up to Marshall and said, “I would like to know this Jesus.”

Afterwards, when everyone was leaving he overheard Jeremy say to a classmate, “ I told you he was a firefighter, like my Daddy always says, “that’s one more that the Devil didn’t get.””


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Jan Ackerson 10/12/06
Very cute twist at the end, and a good job on realistic dialog. Having the football player approach the dad right in class is perhaps a bit "pat" and unrealistic...maybe have him ask the dad if they can talk, and leave your reader to draw the conclusion? Sweet story.
Marilyn Schnepp 10/13/06
Great story and delightful ending. Needs some editing, but keep up the good work!
Helen Paynter10/14/06
A very enjoyable read, and I chuckled at the end becasue you 'got' me. I agree with Jan about the footballer, but I did enjoy it overall.
Donna Emery10/15/06
Oh, what a cute story! I loved the way you developed the characters with the dialog, and I really enjoyed the ending. Nice work!
David Liberto10/18/06
I truly enjoyed the story. I shared with the characters, and appreciated the flow of the dialogue and thoughts. I of course enjoyed the follow-through at the end. I agree with the previous posts and would like to add thank you for a good story.
Carol Gray10/18/06
This was a very nice story. It brought a smile to my face, as well. Great job!