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This is targeted to children age 4-8. Would this be appropriate? I would appreciate any feedback and criticisms. Thanks!
It was a sunny summer afternoon and Kasey and his Mom were enjoying a fun day at the park. They fed the ducks, played on the playground and watched a kite high in the sky. As they were walking down a winding path, Kasey stopped to look at some wildflowers growing nearby. He studied them carefully, looking them over from top to bottom. This made Mom curious.
“What are you looking at, sweetheart?”
Kasey looked very serious.
“Do flowers wear watches?” he asked, frowning.
“Watches?” Mom replied, “I don’t think so; why do you ask?”
“Well,” he began, “if they don’t wear watches, how do they know when it’s time to bloom?”
He paused for a moment and looked around.
“And what about that tree?” he asked, pointing to a majestic maple next to the pond. “Its leaves changed color and fell off last year. How did they all know when to do that? And my puppy, Max! How will he know when to grow?”
Smiling, Mom looked down at Kasey’s puzzled face.
“Those are very good questions,” she said, “Let’s talk over here.”
She led him to a bench and pulled him up on her lap. Brushing back his tousled hair, she looked into his bright blue eyes and began to speak.
“Flowers bloom, leaves change and puppies grow because that’s what they were made to do. See that pink flower over there? Everything inside that flower knows just what to do to make it grow and bloom and be beautiful. It knows to open up in the spring to smile at the sun and to close up for winter when it’s cold and blustery.
“And that tree? Everything inside it knows how to make the leaves come out full and green to give us shade in the summer. Then, at just the right time, they turn yellow and red and fall to the ground before the snow comes.
“And as for Max,” she winked, “everything inside his furry little body knows how to make his ears grow long and floppy and to give him a waggy tail to greet you with every morning.”
Kasey giggled, thinking of how Max loved to wag his tail.
“And the same is true for you!” Mom continued.
“Me?” Kasey wondered with wide eyes.
“Yes!” Mom said, tapping his tummy. “Everything inside you knows how to make you grow up tall and strong and just right…to give you brown hair and freckles and eyes the color of the sky. You were made that way, made to be Kasey and nobody else!”
Kasey smiled. “Thanks, Mom! I knew you would know!”
Kasey felt special knowing that he was made just right. Taking Mom’s hand, he walked through the park looking at the flowers and the trees and thinking about his puppy. It was good to know that they would all do just what they were supposed to do…right on time!
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