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Target audience, children's books. First attempt, not sure if the flow is right would appreciate help. Thank you.
"My, my, my" said Ted E.
"This is such a strange place to be.
Where is the light and the cool breeze?
It's stuffy and crowded here."
"What's your problem?" asked the Spinning Top.
"I'm just wondering why I was put in this box.
My place is on the bed" said Ted E. Bear,
"Not here where it looks like no one cares."
"Just look at yourself" said the Flatten Ball,
"You're old and dirty and that's not all,
Your eye is missing and your arm is torn too.
Look around, everyone here was once brand new."
"I tell you the truth and I know it's a shame,
We were all replaced with a new toy or game."
"Oh no not me" said Ted E. "Little Girl" loves me,
and without me it just wouldn't be the same."
"Hey, yesterday's birthday gift was your clue"
laughed the old worned out Gazoo."
"There's a new stuffed animal now on the bed"
"Yes, but you still don't understand," said Ted.
"Little Girl" and I have been through a lot.
When she had a hospital stay as a tot,
she cried in my fur and hugged me tight.
I was glad my presence there made it seem all right."
"I was there when she was afraid of the dark,
Together we faced every boogeyman's dart.
I was there the first time she took a roller coaster ride.
I think that was when I lost my eye."
"I made a promise to "little girl" when she was born,
said I'd be by her side each night until the morn.
And I know for me she would do the same.
I know that as surely as I know my name."
"You are so funny" said the dented Yellow Toy Bus.
"Little girls grow up and they no longer need us.
So in the box we go, to be thrown out with the trash.
I am sure though in your case her decision was not rash."
"Don't give up hope" said Dolly No Hair,
"Someone might see that you only need a little repair.
You might even be given to another little girl,
Someone to love and to share her world."
Ted E. looked at his worned form, what they said was true,
He was missing a few buttons and had a tear or two.
Maybe there really was another to give comfort to.
But he felt his purpose here was not through.
As the day changed into the night,
The house grew quiet and there was no light.
All of a sudden the closet door flew open!
And into the box came the new stuffed token.
"Where is my Ted E. Bear?" the little girl cried.
"Oh here you are Ted E., why aren't you by my side?
To another little girl the new toy I want to give,
He will have a new home in which to live."
"But you are my friend,
You and me together till the end."
As she picked him up with care,
She hugged him and said "I'll always love you, Ted E. Bear."
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