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Kate and the Creepy Crawlies From Mars
by Donna Haug
11/15/03
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Kate and the Creepy Crawlies From Mars
By: Esther Haug

One day Kate and her two golden retrievers, Drools and Floppy, went for a walk. When she passed her friend’s father’s business building the dogs sat down, lifted their heads high and started howling. Kate pulled as hard as she could at the dogs’ leashes, but no matter how hard she pulled the dogs wouldn’t move. She tried to coax them away, but they wouldn’t listen to her whistling or anything. They didn’t even look at the treats she offered. They just sat there howling. By now, as you can imagine, many people from all over the neighborhood were gathering to see what was going on.

All of a sudden, the dogs stopped howling and lay down staring towards the door. Then Floppy stood up, growled and bared her teeth. Drools saw something, stood up, pulled at her leash, and tried to run away. He whined and pulled and tugged as hard as he could but it was no use. Floppy just wouldn’t stop growling. The sky was a purplish color and dust was flying everywhere. Then the dark, tinted glass door started to move, then the whole building began to shake!

All of a sudden everything was still and silent. Kate listened carefully and heard footsteps and a strange sound. Everything went black for a second. Then, Kate saw a flying saucer in the air! There was a blast of glass exploding on to the street! They saw gigantic insects about 7 feet tall. They looked like a mix between a spider, a crab and a scorpion! They were bright cherry red, had claws, stood upright with 4 legs and had large scorpion tails. They all wore surfing shorts except for about 10 of them who were skinnier and wore bikinis and they were each holding a tiny version of themselves! The little ones wore dusty rose and had undeveloped claws (the claws were just forming so they had little flat plates) and little stubby tails that did not have stingers on them. The babies were about 2 or 2 ½ feet tall and very cute and fuzzy. (Seriously! The parents weren’t, except for the moms. They had a big patch of long hair. The babies just had short hair, but they had it all over.) The babies all wore little swimsuits and had pacifiers in their mouths. The men had brown eyes, the mothers had green eyes and the babies had blue. There were about thirty in all.

Kate looked up and saw the leader, which was about 7 ½ feet tall. His wife stood beside him. She had long, blue hair that reached to the beginning of her tail. She was holding a squirming youngster. The Martian leader looked down at her with dark mean-looking eyes - which I must tell you looks very funny when he was wearing Hawaii flower-patterned swim shorts! Anyway, he looked down at her with a stern (funny-looking) look. Then, he bent over, gave her a big smile and said, “Where’s the beach?” Everybody watching in the crowd behind Kate burst out laughing.

The leader’s kid said, “Daddy?”

“Yes, Angela?” he answered.

“When are we going swimming?”

Everybody from both the Earth and Martian crowds started laughing, falling over, trying to get up, falling down again, and laughing their heads off. Angela started to cry. “What’s the matter, honey cakes?” The leader asked.

“They are scaring me!” Everybody laughed and fell over all over again. Angela just cried more.

“All right. Everybody calm down. You’re scaring the baby!” Everybody stopped laughing, got up and looked at Kate.

“Do you have any pets?” Kate asked.

One of the ladies who didn’t have a baby said, “I have a cat.” She held up something reddish-orange that looked like a giant tiger cub.

“Cool,” Kate said.

“What do you have?” the Martian lady asked.

“I have dogs,” she said, making the dogs go in front so they could see.

“Oh, how cute!” Angela said.

The tiger creature made a sound halfway between a “meow” and a “ROAR” so it sounded sort of like a “meOR!” The dogs barked, the “cat” ran, and the dogs chased. They came to a dead end. The cat growled; the dogs stopped. The “cat” hissed; the dogs whined. The “cat” scratched; the dogs high tailed it out of there. The “cat” trod up to her owner and jumped into her arms and purred. The dogs ran for cover behind Kate.

“Ok, ok, I’ll take you to the beach.” So they went on their way to the beach. One baby found a baby dolphin and was talking about how she saw one of those in a travel catalogue.

After staying for six weeks they left for Mars. Well, they tried to leave. Something was wrong and they had to stay for four more days while their mechanic fixed their spaceship. At the end of the four days, they exchanged good-byes and left. After getting in a fight with that tiger creature, Drools and Floppy never chased another cat.

Just like Kate was scared, we are sometimes scared over things that are friendly and funny. Even if it was real danger like a giant storm, with flash floods and tornados, we don’t need to fear, for God is near and wants to help us. “But you, O Lord, be not far off; O my strength, come quickly to help me.” (Psalm 22:19)


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Mary Elder-Criss 19 Nov 2003
Great Job, Esther! I enjoyed Drools and Floppy very much, they sounded just like my two lovable mutts. Keep up the good work ! ~Mary
Kathy Pollock 16 Nov 2003
Esther, what a great story. I see talent runs in the family! Keep writing!




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