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75 Word Mini Challenge, part 2
by Betty Castleberry
03/20/08
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STORY # 1

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. A black smear painted her cattail. It tasted strong and unpleasant. This must be the oil Mama had warned her about. To make matters worse, Megan wasn’t supposed to be out alone, but she had been hungry. Sneaking home in the fading moonlight wouldn’t be easy. Mama would be waiting on her.

Just as she expected, Mama was treading water in the murky pond. “Megan Muskrat, where you been?”


STORY # 2

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. The yellowish ring had spread under her desk, making an uneven circle between her feet. She had to hide it. Everybody would call her a baby. The bell rang, but she stayed glued to her seat.

Tears splashed down Megan’s face as her teacher approached her desk. “Don’t you want to go home, Megan?”

Megan nodded her through her sobs. “Yes, but I can’t stand up, Miss Jenkins.”


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Holly Westefeld 22 Mar 2008
At risk of being redundant... 1, Creative. 2, Sympathetic.
Lyn Churchyard 21 Mar 2008
Betty, you done it again girl! Very clever idea in your first story,I would never would have thought of using an animal. Oh poor little Megan, I hope her teacher is sympathetic and keeps a change of clothes for the children.
Marita Vandertogt 21 Mar 2008
The first one is very creative, but the second one tugged at my heart strings.
Mo 21 Mar 2008
The 1st is very creative, the 2nd... so real. Great job!
Karen Wilber  21 Mar 2008
Very creative! The second one really captured the girl's emotions well. Made me wish you had a few more words to get her out of her predicament. You made me care. [It'll turn out OK, I'm sure.]
Jan Ackerson  20 Mar 2008
Oh Betty, that second one just totally broke my heart! And Megan Muskrat--I'd never have thought of something like that. Thanks for pitching in again!
Kristen Hester 20 Mar 2008
These are sooo creative. I enjoyed both of these. The first one was so cute! The second, so sad. Great writing, again.
Loren T. Lowery 20 Mar 2008
What fun and what creativity. Who knew you could tell so many stories in just 75 words? I especially like these because they are sooooo easy and fast to read.
K. J. Cash 20 Mar 2008
I wondered who'd want to eat a cattail! You got me there. You've got a wild imagination. That's good, very good! And the second one, both of our stories incorporate the element of embarrasment. Isn't it mischieviously empowering to put our characters through these things. Boo ooh ah ah ah. Great minds think alike!
jodie banner 20 Mar 2008
Ahh, Muskrats! Cute! And a lesson to boot all in 75 words or less.Bravo!!! So embaressing, nothing else needed,perfect.
Joanney Uthe 20 Mar 2008
I love the muskrat! You are so creative. I remember the embarrassment of the second story. You did a great job expressing her feelings.




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