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by Betty Castleberry
03/20/08
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STORY # 1

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. The new countertop was guaranteed against stains, but obviously, the guarantee was worthless. She dreaded the moment Jim came home. He would rant about the wasted expense of getting the new countertop, and how stupid she was for letting the spill happen in the first place. The stains he would leave when he bloodied her lip would be nothing compared to the stains he would leave on her heart.

STORY # 2

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. The depilatory had left a wine-colored mark on her chin. Unfortunately, it had also left the whiskers she was trying to remove. Megan was trying to look nice for her first date in over forty years, but instead she had made things worse. She stared, horrified again, when she realized the bottle of depilatory had spilled and was trickling onto her new silk dress.

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Pat Guy  24 Mar 2008
Yes, you captured a whole life in so few words in both of these. You always make me feel like I want to punch your villians. ;) Very gifted Betty!
Sally Hanan 23 Mar 2008
Great contrast. I love how the horror keeps coming in the second one.
Hanne Moon  22 Mar 2008
Good writing here, Betty! The first one was heartbreaking...so sad. The second one left me saying "Awwww!" Bless her heart! I loved your MCs in both these pieces. :D
Lyn Churchyard 21 Mar 2008
WOW Betty, two stories, and both great. I felt your MC's pain in the first one. The second one... well, just hilarious. Oh dear, poor girl!
Holly Westefeld 21 Mar 2008
You made me care about both of these characters so quickly. The first really threw me, because you are usually lighter in tone. I groaned right along with your second sweet lady.
Jan Ackerson  20 Mar 2008
Thanks, Betty! You really nailed the "totally different" moods bit--and the depilatory one just made my day. The other one: truly horrifying, and an awesome example of how an excellent writer can capture a whole life in just a few words.
Kristen Hester 20 Mar 2008
Great job, Betty. Wasn't this fun. Your first one really caught me off guard. The last line was powerful. The second was cute. You're great!
Loren T. Lowery 20 Mar 2008
Great job, I can better understand the differing moods by reading this. Your choice of words makes such a big difference. BTW, I don't much like the big lug in the first story - shows you how powerful words can be!
Chely Roach 20 Mar 2008
Oh my goodness, these are fabulous. Especially #2, as someone who has experienced a similar allergic reaction...a week before my WEDDING!
Tim Pickl 20 Mar 2008
Wow! I like both stories.
Joanney Uthe 20 Mar 2008
Wow, you captured so much in so few words. Her fear really shows in the first story and I wanted to cringe with her in the second. Great job.




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