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Phantasm 'Haunting Vision'
by David Ian
03/05/08
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Phantasm (Haunting Vision)

Drowning in tears I was
So afraid
Lost in the Hell that my
Sorrows made
Reaching for you in a
Restless trance
A whisper away for
Deliverance

Phantasm--
Apparition in the neon light
Phantasm--
Rescue me in the lonely night
Phantasm--
Like an angel from the stars above
Phantasm--
Cover me with your precious love

Chained in the darkness I'm a
Prisoner
Pain are the bars with my
Thoughts of her
Fall into dreams of
Oblivion
Wake up my heart like the
Rising sun

Phantasm--
Moving slow to the sultry tune
Phantasm--
Cross the floor of a smoky room
Phantasmó
Haunting vision that's so beautiful
Phantasmó
Spark a fire in my restless soul

Phantasm--
Apparition in the neon light
Phantasm--
Rescue me in the lonely night
Phantasm--
Like an angel from the stars above
Phantasm--
Cover me with your precious love




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Verna Cole Mitchell  15 Mar 2008
Beautifully done. Your poem should be set to music.
Patty Wysong 14 Mar 2008
Wow...wow. I'm not a poetry person, but this is Great!! By the way, your article has been chosen by the FW Jewelers as a General Submision jewel for the week. Check out the Cheering Section. :)
Janice Cartwright 14 Mar 2008
I love the swaying rhythm of this, and I too picked up on its "celestial" mood. Nice work.
Dee Yoder  07 Mar 2008
Awesome! Love the rhythm and the choice of words in this article. Fantastic!
Sherry Castelluccio  06 Mar 2008
David, you rock. Seriously, this is good. I always enjoy your writing. This one almost needs a backdrop of the milky way galaxy behind it- or something like that. Good stuff.




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