To view this notification widget you need to have JavaScript enabled. This notification widget was easily created with NotifySnack.
Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Read What's New Join
Faith
Writers
Forum
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

The HOME for Christian writers!
The Home for Christian Writers!

Head Hopping

These lessons, by one of our most consistent FaithWriters' Challenge Champions, should not be missed. So we're making a permanent home for them here.

Moderators: mikeedwards, glorybee

User avatar
CatLin
Pencil Plus (Over 500 Posts)
Pencil Plus (Over 500 Posts)
 
Posts: 5884
Joined: Mon Sep 18, 2006 2:46 pm
Location: Georgia

Re: Head Hopping

Postby CatLin » Fri Apr 15, 2016 6:11 pm

Random comment: I just finished the most uniquely written multiple-1st person POV novel. Each chapter was titled headed with the POV character's name (I think there were five), and was like a letter written to the MC (who's single narrative is saved for the twisty ending.) It was fabulous being inside the heads of all of the characters, despite that I didn't like the ending. :x
Catrina Bradley
FaithWriters Profile
Scattered Seeds
Jewels of Encouragement

"God rewrote the text of my life when I opened the book of my heart to his eyes." Psalm 18:24 (The Message)

User avatar
glorybee
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 7012
Joined: Thu Nov 10, 2005 11:46 pm
Location: Michigan

Re: Head Hopping

Postby glorybee » Fri Apr 15, 2016 8:52 pm

CatLin wrote:Random comment: I just finished the most uniquely written multiple-1st person POV novel. Each chapter was titled headed with the POV character's name (I think there were five), and was like a letter written to the MC (who's single narrative is saved for the twisty ending.) It was fabulous being inside the heads of all of the characters, despite that I didn't like the ending. :x


What's the title of the novel?
Jan Ackerson -- Follow me, friend me, give me a wave!
http://www.superioreditingservice.com
Twitter: @janackerson1
Instagram: janackerson
Facebook: Jan Worgul Ackerson, Superior Editing Service, Jan Ackerson, writer

User avatar
CatLin
Pencil Plus (Over 500 Posts)
Pencil Plus (Over 500 Posts)
 
Posts: 5884
Joined: Mon Sep 18, 2006 2:46 pm
Location: Georgia

Re: Head Hopping

Postby CatLin » Sat Apr 16, 2016 10:02 am

Handle With Care, by Jodi Picoult.
Catrina Bradley
FaithWriters Profile
Scattered Seeds
Jewels of Encouragement

"God rewrote the text of my life when I opened the book of my heart to his eyes." Psalm 18:24 (The Message)

cgpeoples
Pencil 1 (1-49 Posts)
Pencil 1 (1-49 Posts)
 
Posts: 13
Joined: Fri Feb 26, 2016 12:21 am

Re: Head Hopping

Postby cgpeoples » Thu May 12, 2016 12:06 pm

Lynn's POV

Lynn watched carefully as her foster daughter, Joelle, and her biological daughter, Kelsey, sat at the kitchen table playing Pop the Bubble game.

She couldn't help but notice Joelle's lack of enthusiasm. Her slender figure sat bent over with her elbow propped on the table, chin resting in the palm of her hand, as she stared off into space.

But Kelsey, on the other hand, expressed sheer delight as she moved the little yellow pegs around the board.

"See...watch," Joelle exclaimed. "It's fun!"

Lynn sighed with relief when, after several rounds, Kelsey reached over and popped the plastic bubble, moved a peg the proper spaces, and gently smiled.

User avatar
glorybee
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 7012
Joined: Thu Nov 10, 2005 11:46 pm
Location: Michigan

Re: Head Hopping

Postby glorybee » Thu May 12, 2016 1:10 pm

cgpeoples wrote:Lynn's POV

Lynn watched carefully as her foster daughter, Joelle, and her biological daughter, Kelsey, sat at the kitchen table playing Pop the Bubble game.

She couldn't help but notice Joelle's lack of enthusiasm. Her slender figure sat bent over with her elbow propped on the table, chin resting in the palm of her hand, as she stared off into space.

But Kelsey, on the other hand, expressed sheer delight as she moved the little yellow pegs around the board.

"See...watch," Joelle exclaimed. "It's fun!"

Lynn sighed with relief when, after several rounds, Kelsey reached over and popped the plastic bubble, moved a peg the proper spaces, and gently smiled.


Well done--no head-hopping here, whatsoever! (I think you confused the two little girls, though, from the first paragraph to later ones. No biggie.)
Jan Ackerson -- Follow me, friend me, give me a wave!
http://www.superioreditingservice.com
Twitter: @janackerson1
Instagram: janackerson
Facebook: Jan Worgul Ackerson, Superior Editing Service, Jan Ackerson, writer

User avatar
AnnaBanana
Pencil 1 (1-49 Posts)
Pencil 1 (1-49 Posts)
 
Posts: 43
Joined: Wed Aug 26, 2015 11:53 am

Re: Head Hopping

Postby AnnaBanana » Fri May 13, 2016 4:34 pm

I started out just wanting to say thank you for the lesson, but I went back through my some of my challenge entries to see if I do you this "head-hopping" and I couldn't find a place where I did. What I did find out is how little I reference what the characters think, at least in the 6 or 7 stories I looked through. How important is it to do that? I generally use dialogue or action although I do have some stories where I do it more.
Blessings,
Rachel

User avatar
glorybee
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 7012
Joined: Thu Nov 10, 2005 11:46 pm
Location: Michigan

Re: Head Hopping

Postby glorybee » Fri May 13, 2016 4:38 pm

AnnaBanana wrote:I started out just wanting to say thank you for the lesson, but I went back through my some of my challenge entries to see if I do you this "head-hopping" and I couldn't find a place where I did. What I did find out is how little I reference what the characters think, at least in the 6 or 7 stories I looked through. How important is it to do that? I generally use dialogue or action although I do have some stories where I do it more.


In ultra-short fiction, depicting characters' thoughts isn't absolutely vital. However, in longer fiction, thoughts help to develop "deep POV," which is definitely the contemporary standard.
Jan Ackerson -- Follow me, friend me, give me a wave!
http://www.superioreditingservice.com
Twitter: @janackerson1
Instagram: janackerson
Facebook: Jan Worgul Ackerson, Superior Editing Service, Jan Ackerson, writer

User avatar
AnnaBanana
Pencil 1 (1-49 Posts)
Pencil 1 (1-49 Posts)
 
Posts: 43
Joined: Wed Aug 26, 2015 11:53 am

Re: Head Hopping

Postby AnnaBanana » Sat May 14, 2016 12:45 pm

Okay, thanks!
Blessings,
Rachel

User avatar
hwnj
Pencil 5 (200-299 Posts)
Pencil 5 (200-299 Posts)
 
Posts: 245
Joined: Fri Nov 23, 2007 9:02 am
Location: New Jersey, USA

Re: Head Hopping

Postby hwnj » Fri May 20, 2016 8:10 pm

Color me dense, but I'm having trouble getting a crisp understanding of the difference between third person omnicient and head hopping. Without going back to look, I think I mainly use asterisks to indicate a lapse of time or shift in location. I think I try to use dialogue to express characters thoughts.

If third omnicient is not favored, then I am toast this week. :D
Holly

"There are two ways of spreading light -- to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it." Edith Wharton

'It is better to be liked for the true you, than to be loved for who people think you are.'

"In order to realize the worth of the anchor, one needs to feel the stress of the storm." Daily Encouragement Net (Stephen & Brooksyne Weber)

My Profile

User avatar
glorybee
Moderator
Moderator
 
Posts: 7012
Joined: Thu Nov 10, 2005 11:46 pm
Location: Michigan

Re: Head Hopping

Postby glorybee » Fri May 20, 2016 8:27 pm

hwnj wrote:Color me dense, but I'm having trouble getting a crisp understanding of the difference between third person omnicient and head hopping. Without going back to look, I think I mainly use asterisks to indicate a lapse of time or shift in location. I think I try to use dialogue to express characters thoughts.

If third omnicient is not favored, then I am toast this week. :D


That's probably because there's no crisp difference.

Third person omniscient is a valid way to write, and can be done well. There are times when it's the best way to serve the writer's purpose. But there are other times (like those in this lesson) when it's jarring or discombobulating to the reader, and can even lead her to think that Character A is thinking or experiencing something when in reality, it's Character B.

As with everything writing-related, it's more about the artistry than the 'rule.' Once this week's entries are judged, I'd love to know which is yours so I can look at your use of 3rd person omniscient. I've never been able to quite get the hang of it.
Jan Ackerson -- Follow me, friend me, give me a wave!
http://www.superioreditingservice.com
Twitter: @janackerson1
Instagram: janackerson
Facebook: Jan Worgul Ackerson, Superior Editing Service, Jan Ackerson, writer

Previous

Return to Jan's Writing Basics

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: Google [Bot] and 3 guests

cron

© MeasurelessMedia. All rights reservedTerms of Service



Jesus - True for You But not for Me      Website Builder     Build Website     Is Jesus God?    
Does God exist?     Build a writers website     Does truth exist?     Website online in minutes