Thanks Jan for the added clarity.
I see what you mean. I have lots of room for improvement.
Judy
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- Mon Oct 26, 2015 8:51 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
- Replies: 15
- Views: 36300
- Mon Oct 26, 2015 6:20 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
- Replies: 15
- Views: 36300
Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
1. Josie was over-the-moon giddy about her third date with Charlie. After their second date, “He’s the one!” she gushed to her girlfriends. Much to Josie’s dismay, his movie choice was not romantic nor a comedy. Instead, it was a scary movie. He may have thought she would seek refuge in his arms, bu...
- Tue Oct 13, 2015 3:38 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--WRITING IN DIFFERENT TENSES
- Replies: 14
- Views: 17647
Re: Be a Better Writer--WRITING IN DIFFERENT TENSES
My exposure to writing in other tenses than 1st person, present tense, is limited.[I want to write very limited but thought the very was not needed.] My lack of depth in other tenses makes me feel ill-equipped to comment on advantages and disadvantages. First person, present tense feels comfortable ...
- Sun Oct 11, 2015 7:43 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #3
- Replies: 54
- Views: 74246
Re: Dialog #3
Jan,
I found this lesson on tenses. Haven't gotten into it, but I bet it will open my eyes to a whole new world of information.
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpB ... 67&t=38639
Judy
I found this lesson on tenses. Haven't gotten into it, but I bet it will open my eyes to a whole new world of information.
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpB ... 67&t=38639
Judy
- Sat Oct 10, 2015 8:00 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #3
- Replies: 54
- Views: 74246
Re: Dialog #3
Did I find it? she fits Josie’s newborn clothes I forgot "into" Present tense is how I write even though this story was something that happened two days ago. So I need to basically stretch my 4'10" body and mind to past tense. Is there a lesson on doing this effectively? This would us...
- Sat Oct 10, 2015 3:52 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #3
- Replies: 54
- Views: 74246
Dialog #3
PART 1 - STORY “Hi there Josie,” Nana says, “thanks for calling us.” Looking at the iPad, “Nahnaa,” she giggles. “Pawpaw,” she coos. “Melissa, her hypnotic blue eyes, and long eyelashes are mesmerizing.” “I know. Not real sure where she got them, but they sure are gorgeous.” “Pawpaw,” Josie whispers...
- Thu Oct 08, 2015 7:10 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #2
- Replies: 52
- Views: 113211
Re: Dialog #2
“Little Josie is so adorable Judy. You must be very proud to be her grandma,” her sister Toni said. “Yes, she is a cutie. I cannot get enough of her little giggles.” “Let me show you what I’ve been doing. I print out every picture of Josie that Melissa posts on Facebook.” “That’s three inches thick,...
- Thu Oct 08, 2015 5:37 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #1
- Replies: 103
- Views: 191201
Re: Dialog #1
Thanks Jan. I look forward to more lessons. I'm on a roll.
Judy
Judy
- Wed Oct 07, 2015 7:45 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #1
- Replies: 103
- Views: 191201
Re: Dialog #1
A defiant Jocelyn, who is 14 years old, questions her mom’s decision. “Why won’t you let me go to the movie with Ashley and Tiffani tonight? All the kids are going.” Tina has boundary issues. She perceives Jocelyn as her friend rather than her daughter. This is the source of all their fights because...
- Tue Oct 06, 2015 7:08 pm
- Forum: Platinum Member Perks & Benefits
- Topic: And the list goes on...
- Replies: 6
- Views: 14594
Re: And the list goes on...
I read in a posting today that there are three writing craft books for 500 Platinum members. I've been unable to find them. Do you have the links?
Thanks
Judy
Thanks
Judy
- Sun Oct 04, 2015 6:31 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--Commas with conjunctions
- Replies: 22
- Views: 25216
Re: Be a Better Writer--Commas with conjunctions
Hi Jan,
Even though I was unable to open this lesson from your complied lists, going through the list of actual lessons enabled me to open it. I'm glad my tenacity wasn't letting up because I learned a great acronym FANBOYS. What a great tool. Thank you!
Judy
Even though I was unable to open this lesson from your complied lists, going through the list of actual lessons enabled me to open it. I'm glad my tenacity wasn't letting up because I learned a great acronym FANBOYS. What a great tool. Thank you!
Judy
- Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:50 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion
- Replies: 40
- Views: 67012
Re: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion
Hi Jan, I'm adding more than 100 words because after reading your lesson, I realized that this entry would have had a better ending without the final paragraph. Your thoughts? http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article-level3-previous.php?id=50165 =============== To let it go requires us to sever our gl...
- Wed Sep 30, 2015 7:39 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Conclusion #1--the 5th judging conclusion
- Replies: 23
- Views: 31745
Re: Conclusion #1--the 5th judging conclusion
here's a poem I wrote in 2010. "Don't You Know?"
http://www.faithwriters.com/article-det ... ?id=180186
http://www.faithwriters.com/article-det ... ?id=180186
- Wed Sep 30, 2015 6:43 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Conclusion #1--the 5th judging conclusion
- Replies: 23
- Views: 31745
Re: Conclusion #1--the 5th judging conclusion
Conclusion of nonfiction challenge article. After reading critiques, and taking your lessons, I see the errors of my ways. These final 150 words (some editing made) is my homework. The week is running out of time and I’m not ready to let go of my granddaughter, Josie, seventeen months old.. Anxietie...
- Wed Sep 30, 2015 5:42 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
- Replies: 47
- Views: 81325
Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Jan,
I get the message, You cannot post edits in this forum.
Maybe it's just the one link in Beginning Writers.
Judy
I get the message, You cannot post edits in this forum.
Maybe it's just the one link in Beginning Writers.
Judy