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- Thu Jan 30, 2014 3:10 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be A Better Writer--ANTAGONISTS
- Replies: 28
- Views: 35271
Re: Be A Better Writer--ANTAGONISTS
I'm late responding but... So many of the entry examples that have been given are truly wonderful. I hope it's okay but I didn't use one of my challenge entries for this lesson. I picked one of my general entry stories for a reason. I want to know, Jan, who the real antagonist is in this one. It is ...
- Wed Nov 20, 2013 1:34 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--INTENTIONAL ANACHRONISM
- Replies: 8
- Views: 10444
Re: Be a Better Writer--INTENTIONAL ANACHRONISM
Sorry I'm late with this response. This was one I didn't want to miss because I enjoy writing in this style. I wrote one about about biblical characters using a laptop computer to get battle plans. I'm assuming that would qualify as intentional... right? Joshua Fit the Battle http://www.faithwriters...
- Mon Nov 04, 2013 5:23 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be A Better Writer--ALLUSION
- Replies: 32
- Views: 52085
Re: Be A Better Writer--ALLUSION
Jan, I am linking to a challenge piece because I have a question. In this piece I (hopefully) alluded to the plan of salvation throughout all of it. After reading your description of Allusion, I am doubting whether it really is allusion. Perhaps the "blood red spot at the center" is an all...
- Mon Oct 28, 2013 1:32 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
- Replies: 32
- Views: 49693
Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLITERATION
Jan, after your comment about too much alliteration being annoying, I thought I would ask a question. Is it annoying if the "too much" is intentional? I wrote a poem that, from the outset, I had planned to use excessive alliteration to make it more fun to read. I didn't expect it to get Ed...
- Mon Oct 21, 2013 9:43 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY
- Replies: 21
- Views: 25857
Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY
Okay, I think I know what makes an allegory allegorical. I have another entry that was for the topic "seasons" where I used a tree to represent our lives, from birth to old age. Would that be allegory or symbolism? Come to think of it, is symbolism an inseparable part of allegory? "Th...
- Mon Oct 21, 2013 6:18 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY
- Replies: 21
- Views: 25857
Re: Be a Better Writer--ALLEGORY
Jan, I wrote this challenge entry several years ago meaning for it to be an allegory. Nobody ever commented on it as an allegory and I was just wondering if I missed the point. Was it too obvious? Too vague? Not fantastical? Just wondering. The story is called "Steps". http://www.faithwrit...
- Tue Oct 01, 2013 12:22 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
- Replies: 23
- Views: 29282
Re: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
I agree 100% with all that you said... even the cookie sentence rewrite. And, yes, I WAS only joking about the judges. I have no doubts whatsoever about the integrity of the challenge system.
- Tue Oct 01, 2013 1:59 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
- Replies: 23
- Views: 29282
Re: Be a Better Writer--COMPOUND SENTENCES
So…I guess what I’m saying is that you need to start working on having a specific voice—something that makes your writing identifiably yours . Jan, this lesson is scary! If we succeed in being good enough writers to have an "identifiable" voice then the challenge judges will know by our e...
- Mon Sep 23, 2013 10:20 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES
- Replies: 40
- Views: 59512
Re: Be a Better Writer--SIMPLE SENTENCES
Jan, those in Masters do still need help. I know... I is one. :roll: For the assignment, I chose a story that got several comments about its well written, effective style. The reason I picked this one is simple... for having so many comments about how good it was, it didn't get any notice at all fro...
- Mon Sep 16, 2013 7:33 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
- Replies: 102
- Views: 242751
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TIGHT WRITING
I can see the error of my own editing... I already had it down to 100 words before I was half way through the editing. But here is my effort. Doreen didn’t look up from her book. She was aware of the big man sitting next to her so she inched closer to the window. As the train sped through the second...
- Mon Aug 26, 2013 6:51 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE
- Replies: 43
- Views: 44487
Re: New Writing Lessons--WHAT A CRITIQUE LOOKS LIKE
Would this entry have fit the topic better if the church people had been "whining about theology instead of praying about reality"? Granny could have made a statement like that in her long speech. Or would that have been no more effective than the whining sound? I agree this story had a lo...
- Thu Aug 15, 2013 1:21 pm
- Forum: Results and Highest Rankings
- Topic: Winners for EXPIRED
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6867
Re: Winners for EXPIRED
I am humbled to be included with this wonderful writers and SHOCKED to see my name at the top of the list. I enjoyed the other entries far more than my own. Thank you.
- Wed Aug 07, 2013 2:06 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS
- Replies: 27
- Views: 39029
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--TRANSITIONS
Jan, this sample is from an editorial I wrote a few months ago. I was just wondering if you thought different transitions could have been chosen, and for what reasons. Your classes are an incredible encouragement to writers. Thank you for your time and effort. As a Christian newspaper publisher, I a...
- Tue Aug 06, 2013 10:28 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--POV
- Replies: 8
- Views: 11546
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--POV
This example is from a writing challenge several years ago. I think it does a better job of describing the main character than if a more traditional POV gave a long, word filled description of the character. The hard part in this piece was making the other characters come across with more understand...
- Thu Aug 01, 2013 11:32 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New Writing Lessons--FREE VERSE POETRY, #2
- Replies: 24
- Views: 32112
Re: Jan's New Writing Lessons--FREE VERSE POETRY
Jan, I wrote this one years ago. I see at least key word repetition and simile. Did I accidently get any others? I pity the man who measures his life in mediocre moments. If my life must be measured in moments Let them be spectacular moments. Life should be a vivid variety of vibrant memories. Each ...