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I'm late responding but... So many of the entry examples that have been given are truly wonderful. I hope it's okay but I didn't use one of my challenge entries for this lesson. I picked one of my general entry stories for a reason. I want to know, Jan, who the real antagonist is in this one. It is ...

Sorry I'm late with this response. This was one I didn't want to miss because I enjoy writing in this style. I wrote one about about biblical characters using a laptop computer to get battle plans. I'm assuming that would qualify as intentional... right? Joshua Fit the Battle http://www.faithwriters...

Jan, I am linking to a challenge piece because I have a question. In this piece I (hopefully) alluded to the plan of salvation throughout all of it. After reading your description of Allusion, I am doubting whether it really is allusion. Perhaps the "blood red spot at the center" is an all...

Jan, after your comment about too much alliteration being annoying, I thought I would ask a question. Is it annoying if the "too much" is intentional? I wrote a poem that, from the outset, I had planned to use excessive alliteration to make it more fun to read. I didn't expect it to get Ed...

Okay, I think I know what makes an allegory allegorical. I have another entry that was for the topic "seasons" where I used a tree to represent our lives, from birth to old age. Would that be allegory or symbolism? Come to think of it, is symbolism an inseparable part of allegory? "Th...

Jan, I wrote this challenge entry several years ago meaning for it to be an allegory. Nobody ever commented on it as an allegory and I was just wondering if I missed the point. Was it too obvious? Too vague? Not fantastical? Just wondering. The story is called "Steps". http://www.faithwrit...

I agree 100% with all that you said... even the cookie sentence rewrite. And, yes, I WAS only joking about the judges. I have no doubts whatsoever about the integrity of the challenge system.

So…I guess what I’m saying is that you need to start working on having a specific voice—something that makes your writing identifiably yours . Jan, this lesson is scary! If we succeed in being good enough writers to have an "identifiable" voice then the challenge judges will know by our e...

Jan, those in Masters do still need help. I know... I is one. :roll: For the assignment, I chose a story that got several comments about its well written, effective style. The reason I picked this one is simple... for having so many comments about how good it was, it didn't get any notice at all fro...

I can see the error of my own editing... I already had it down to 100 words before I was half way through the editing. But here is my effort. Doreen didn’t look up from her book. She was aware of the big man sitting next to her so she inched closer to the window. As the train sped through the second...

Would this entry have fit the topic better if the church people had been "whining about theology instead of praying about reality"? Granny could have made a statement like that in her long speech. Or would that have been no more effective than the whining sound? I agree this story had a lo...

I am humbled to be included with this wonderful writers and SHOCKED to see my name at the top of the list. I enjoyed the other entries far more than my own. Thank you.

Jan, this sample is from an editorial I wrote a few months ago. I was just wondering if you thought different transitions could have been chosen, and for what reasons. Your classes are an incredible encouragement to writers. Thank you for your time and effort. As a Christian newspaper publisher, I a...

This example is from a writing challenge several years ago. I think it does a better job of describing the main character than if a more traditional POV gave a long, word filled description of the character. The hard part in this piece was making the other characters come across with more understand...

Jan, I wrote this one years ago. I see at least key word repetition and simile. Did I accidently get any others? I pity the man who measures his life in mediocre moments. If my life must be measured in moments Let them be spectacular moments. Life should be a vivid variety of vibrant memories. Each ...