Sorry I did not catch the tense problems. I guess the most obvious slipped past me! I know I have problems with keeping the proper tense. I work at avoiding the use of "was," "had" and "did." It's not easy!
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- Mon Feb 01, 2010 1:53 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #3: Choosing a Tense and Sticking to It
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- Mon Feb 01, 2010 1:32 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #3: Choosing a Tense and Sticking to It
- Replies: 81
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Jan prepared a helpful list for her beginner’s writing class. Jan put the list away for safe keeping. Jan has not been able to remember where she stored the list. Jan prepares a helpful list for her beginner’s writing class. Jan is putting the list away for safe keeping. Jan is not able to remember ...
- Mon Feb 01, 2010 1:19 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #3: Choosing a Tense and Sticking to It
- Replies: 81
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- Mon Jan 25, 2010 9:58 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverbs
- Replies: 129
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Rewrite: I am not too proud to keep trying until I get it right! Exhausted, Jan walked into the refuge of her house at the end of a long discouraging day at work. Slipping off her pinching shoes at the door, the working single mom plodded toward the cluttered kitchen. She craved a cold soda and some...
- Mon Jan 25, 2010 2:41 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverbs
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Exhausted, Jan walked into the refuge of her house at the end of a long day at work. She slipped off her pinching ebony shoes at the door and plodded toward the quiet kitchen. She craved a cold soda and something sweet. She hoped to find leftover cake in the ice box. “Ow!” She raised her foot to fin...
- Wed Jan 20, 2010 5:05 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New "Class"--Writing Basics
- Replies: 115
- Views: 140200
Salsa
Jan...Thanks for your ministry to all of us! I want to sharpen my skills and you are making a way! As a Devotional writer my favorite author is Charles Spurgeon. I read his work and think if I only had his way with words! From "Meditation for This Evening" Tuesday, January 12,2010 Charles ...
- Fri Mar 13, 2009 8:05 pm
- Forum: Results and Highest Rankings
- Topic: Highest Ranked Entries for ASIA
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- Mon Mar 02, 2009 12:07 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Master Class--SURPRISE
- Replies: 41
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Surprise endings
This is my very first time here. I feel like a kid in school during roll call, wanting to raise my hand and say, "Present!" I am a beginner, with so much to learn. I love surprises, especially when they are from God! One of my short stories "The Interior Designer" has surprised l...