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- Tue Mar 15, 2016 6:12 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
- Replies: 58
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Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
I appreciate it, Jan. I understand where you are coming from. I struggle with this concept and know I need to improve tremendously in this area. I am worried my book is poorly crafted. I got carried away with the assignment and apologize.
- Tue Mar 15, 2016 1:44 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
- Replies: 58
- Views: 93139
Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
I hope I am doing this right... Telling:Jack was there early and talked with the Chaplain. He shared his story, admitted his mistakes, and expressed the desire to get back to God. Jack felt an emptiness within him. Reach as he would for it, that feeling of incompleteness, aloneness would not be fill...
- Mon Mar 14, 2016 7:04 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
- Replies: 15
- Views: 34602
Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
Show – Don’t Tell Homework Kathy Curry HOMEWORK: 1. Re-write this mostly-telling paragraph so that it contains more showing. Josie felt really happy when she was with Charlie. It was their third date, and she thought maybe he was the one for her. But she had second thoughts when he took her to a sca...
- Fri Mar 11, 2016 8:24 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
- Replies: 104
- Views: 193928
Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
I will make the changes you suggest. This is what follows: . It was not a snake, it was not a lizard. Its skin sparkled like the most perfect diamonds and its eyes were such a deep cerulean blue you could get lost gazing into them. This little creature had both, wings and fins, almost like a fish bu...
- Fri Mar 11, 2016 8:16 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverbs
- Replies: 129
- Views: 283692
Re: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverb
I will definitely work on this. I have gotten 3 honorable mentions in the beginner's category, but have yet to place. I need to figure out where I am lacking. I know I tend to get wordy. I so appreciate these lessons and your input! ![Thank you :thankssign](./images/smilies/icon_new_thanks.gif)
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- Fri Mar 11, 2016 3:43 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverbs
- Replies: 129
- Views: 283692
Re: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverb
Jan’s Writing Basics Adjectives and Adverbs HOMEWORK Exhausted, weary, and worn out, Jan walked tiredly into her house at the end of a long, seemingly endless day at work. She slipped off her dark ebony shoes at the door and plodded unenthusiastically toward the kitchen. All she wanted was an icy co...
- Fri Mar 11, 2016 2:56 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
- Replies: 104
- Views: 193928
Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Once upon a time, before we understood time, when the world had first been created; God created a small serpentine creature. It was a time before we understood time; the time of the creation. Jehovah said; "Let the land produce creatures of its kind..." and in response colors swirled, the...
- Wed Feb 17, 2016 9:27 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
- Replies: 104
- Views: 193928
Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Once upon a time, before we understood time, when the world had first been created; God created a small serpentine creature.